I did not really read it but hey, here goes nothing

It seems to me that this is some kind of script, maybe to a play, maybe a movie, idk. Based on statistics, this script is not good, most scripts are not, especially short ones found only on the internet is often below avarage.

well so lets summarize what we got so far, this is probably a script, and its with high probability a bad one.

Now im not saying this is absolutely so, in fact, i dont know. But this repseudoview is a pretty strong educated guess, if thats not good enough for you, and you are more bored than me, i suggest you read it.

i lol'd

I shall sum this up in one acronym:

LOL

Where is more porn?

Lol this was super funny. Written great as well.

Just because one sees the ending coming doesn't make it any less good. This was hilarious. Easily could be considered an R-rated episode of the show if it were a little longer.

MLP is an odd choice for bawdy humor, but it was cute.

For some reason I think Fluttershy would be more into this.

LOL nice

lol. At first I was like, D8 NOOOOOO MY CHILDHOOD But then I was like, whew... but i thought dash was ... ya know... enthusiastic...

*Maniacal snort-giggle*

So awesome! xD

Best. Prank. EVAAAAAAAR!

This shit is funny.

Really.

I'm gonna read it again.

-Delta-

This may or may not be the extreme fatigue talking, but the story was pretty mildly amusing and not laugh out loud funny.

I loved how you did Pinkie Pie. The mixture of excessive talking, unnecessary add-on sentences, the inappropriate reactions, and the hilariously inappropriate appropriate reactions were all great. I especially loved it with the bits about Twilight's little modifications to the machine.

Rainbow Dash was incredibly amusing in how she tried to fly herself out of her little hole. Her concern for Pinkie Pie was rather amusing, especially when coupled with Pinkie Pie's unknowing and random responses.

Twilight was amusingly in-character. I adore her calmness, and her scientific approach to the whole thing, most particularly with her scientific terminology which I, as a somewhat educated person, get. And too much, as a matter of fact...

The little bit about Rarity and Applejack made me smile, if mostly because I like that Odd-Couple (Relation)Shipping.

The ending, though appropriate for the pranks of Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash, didn't really get me though.

Still, lovely story.

That was hilarious.

A good follow up to the previous installment.