Ack, Kyarorain, you've ALWAYS been one of my favourite authors but we've never interacted much, heh.
I really loved this story and the concept of Jenna's pain with everyone 'leaving her'.
Must say my favourites line/s was"What, now you're going to take our son away from me? It really shows Jenna's frustration in a sense, and I like that. And then,"I feel like everyone's leaving me. Awwwww. ;_
But once again, good job with your stories!

Akemina.

Ooooh boy, now that's one nice story. I absolutely love how you put a strong emphasis on explaining things via conversation without making it look like the "Look, the tower is moving from left to right!" type of explanation.

However, I did notice you completely abandoned Felix's wife halfway through. I would have liked to see Jenna talking to her or something. A wife is supposed to be just as important to someone as a sister, if not more.

Nonetheless, I liked this story a great deal and in lieu of the competition that never really got going I'll be posting my score on the forum thread when I've read the only other one.

awwww...poor Jenna D

nice fic, with the right touch of sadness

Aw, that was really sad at the end. Why did he go and leave like that? I hope we're going to find out in Golden Sun 4.