This is a good series but a lot of the words are miss placed and the quotation marks are in the wrongs places just some friendly advice:-)

That was much better, now it makes things clear well, the chapter was pretty nice, you're making a very simple plot, that is something very good for starters.

-_-' You didn't need to go that far.

was nice would be good if you review the speaches, I'm getting very confused sometimes because the phrases are not well separated from the narration that's easy to luck on your updates.

Flo is on SF?Why would she come?Weird...nice chapter!

Ok, the bulldog is named Charlie?I've got confused.