|Reviews for Memories|
| TurquoiseHeart15 1/14/12 . chapter 1
Awwww. She prego _ i love the flash backs. And now i kinda wanna hav my wedding on the beach xD its seems so romantic. Your an amazing writer, btw. You should so become like, an actual author that writes like, books and stuff. And im not just saying that. I hope you become discovered! Bye now :)
Love and hugs,
| Country Appaloosa 12/30/11 . chapter 1
Love love love it! I have actually been to old castles in Germany. They are reeeaaaallllllyyyyy boring. Once you've seen one, you've seen em all. Trust me.
I think it's funny that everyone makes Danny faint whenever Sam tells him she pregnant. Why the shoulder length hair? Chin length I can imagine, but to the shoulder? I guess I can't talk, my brother used to have hair half way down his waist. He cut it off when my sister-in-law was 8 months pregnant. Said he wanted to look responsible. Enough about my life!
As far as I could tell you didn't make any mistakes. Or at least I didn't notice them. Love your story, are you going to write more? You should!
| book phan44 4/25/11 . chapter 1
| x AzureSkies x 4/24/11 . chapter 1
This is a cute oneshot, I liked it. Though some of the plot elements are overused, your writing style livened it up.
There were no screaming plot discrepancies that I could see, and to the best of my knowledge the story matched up with the original series. This appears to be what you were going for, so good job. The only thing that I found a little confusing was the timeline. I would suggest making Sam's flashbacks more clear, by putting an extra line before and after, using italics for the duration of the flashback, or at least changing the tense ("Sam agreed" to "Sam had agreed"). The transition was anything but abrupt, but emphasizing the switch a little more might help some readers.
Also, it was a unclear to me how long it had been since the Fentons had their honeymoon. The fact that Sam found the old photo album in the back of a closet makes me think it's been several years, but if that isn't what you intended, I would suggest clarifying.
I found no grammatical or spelling errors, which is surprisingly refreshing. Your vocabulary was also above average. Bonus points for using a word I had to look up.
You characterized Danny, Sam and Tucker very well for a oneshot, but if you ever expand upon this story, don't be afraid to develop them even more. Each author has something new to bring out in a character.
| DannySamLover20 4/24/11 . chapter 1
omg wow! lol! nice job!
| Codiak 4/24/11 . chapter 1
Oh, God... LMAO! That was cute! ;)