I love that the kids get to hear the story it's such a cool idea for Eams (and others) to be telling the story. These chapters have obviously been pre-movie but when does Ariadne come in? I like this chapter by the way. The whole this is their first exstraction and how they met ect. You had a few grammatical errors but other than that this story is very well written
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Alcoholic Goldfish

Awesome idea for the story. It's a little confusing though. Gabriel, max, and Anne are OC's right? And is micheal Cobs dad (the professor) from inception? Sorry if these are stupid questions I'm just a little confused but overall this story is amazing so far

Keep it up
alcoholic goldfish

Well have to say, loving it so far...

Awesome next please

Awh I love the set up around this, as it being a story Eames is telling to his kids. That's a very clever idea. I'm liking this so far.