Confused and intrigued and wanting to know more. I'll go and find the Mentalist cross over looking forward to that and to your next posting. This was a very good start and has drawn me in to wanting to know more.

I haven't read your other story...but so far this one looks to be pretty intense! Very descriptive, it flows really well. Looking forward to more of it...I'm thinking that the way this is written that this is the ending and what we will read in the next chapter will be what happened earlier? Or is that going to be in your other story and this one picks up where that one leaves off? Either way, I will take a look at the other story when I get the chance, so that I won't be guessing so much.
Thank you for the story! Looking forward to more of it.)

True, it's a Charlie kidnapped story and it's been done before.

But a well-written, well thought out story is a well-written, well thought out story.

So far, I can say that this is well-written and I await eagerly to see if it's also well thought out.

Please continue.

I really like your writing style and I am certainly hooked on this storyline. I loved the image of Charlie trying to run to Don on weak and unsteady legs. I hope you post chapter two soon, regardless of when you update RMR. I'd really like to know what happened to Charlie.

I'm extremely tired of Charlie being kidnapped, but this opening looks promising. However, I don't watch the Mentalist, so I may have trouble following. I liked the scene between the brothers, very emotional.

Charlie is kidnapped. There's an original idea.