|Reviews for A Day Out|
| georgie 12/27/12 . chapter 3
Cool sounds great!
| zl145 1/1/12 . chapter 7
please please please im beggin you continue with this story i love it :)
| Ashy143 12/8/11 . chapter 7
this is such a cute story! good ending :) r u going to do anymore outnumberd stories? or carry on with this one ? xx
| 5daysofsummer 9/23/11 . chapter 7
pretty pretty plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz will u carry this story on i lovehe idea of jake n a oc girlfriend n a great backstory
| XscouselondonerX 9/5/11 . chapter 7
Great story, there really should be more like this on here. Are you writing anymore?
| simplexdreams 7/29/11 . chapter 7
Love this story, you should write more, like one shots or something:), love seeing a story when Jake gets a girlfriend!:)xx
| 08lordj 7/16/11 . chapter 7
I liked it not the story but of the possible future of Emily and Jake I would have liked it even more if you did write your own story/episode. I would love to see more from this pairing and can't wait for the next story and I'm sure people will help if it is neeeded.
| HappyHedgehogs 6/13/11 . chapter 3
isn't this already an episode? im so confused :P
| ficwriter13 6/1/11 . chapter 7
First let me say not bad. It was quite good, but I would add in a bit more of your own detail, rather than quote from the episode with a couple of lines added in.
My second criticsm would be the spelling and punctuation. Starting from Chapter 2, there were two typos in the first paragraph. The main mistakes are as follows. Firstly, when refering to a place, it is 'there' not 'their'. Another thing which turns up a lot, is Trafalgar Square. 'Yhea' is spelt 'Yeah'. I also think you called 'Jake' Jack a couple of times as well. It is quite important to get the characters name right. 'Witch' is 'Which'. I could go on.
I hope I wasn't too harsh on your writing, but I think you could benefit from a spell check or a Beta.
Overall well done!