This is an interesting, if short, story.

My only point to make would be that I don't think you completely got under Asuka's skin when writing this.

Her feelings were that Saiou was all there was. He was salvation, almost god-like.

And as for her views on herself before Saiou, I don't think she actually thinks on herself as having been a 'doll', but rather as a girl who had yet to open her eyes to the 'Light'.

Nice. It was annoying that one, Asuka never gets to use that card, and two, she loses more than she wins in the series.

Nice. And true.

"A duelist, not a doll." Favorite line, to be sure. No one quite writes Asuka like you do :)

"A duelist, not a doll." Favorite line, to be sure. No one quite writes Asuka like you do :)

loved it a lot and i love the way you show each character thoughts

Hiya, nice story and it has a good portrayal of Asuka when she was in the Society.

Just a random request but can you write what would have happened if Judai was an UKE like most of the rabid fangirls claim he is?

I haven't seen all of GX but I quit like Asuka, thank you for starting this series.

10 points for canonWhite!Asuka.

5 points for canonSaiou.

And a pizza because you're just awesome. :D

(No CC here, sorry.)

HB