Hello,

its Just a while ago I started studying again, and that has limited a bit of my free time, hence that I have collected a couple of chapters, but woa, this chapters are quite long and detailed in terms of content and the events that take place in them.

From Chapter 23, was a break before the start of the main conflicts in the story and you gave them a little time for the couples (already established and in process) plus it was also nice to see differences as Yzak worrying about Flay, and thought a bit more about things, or at least more than what I remember from the original story, and it sounds weird,but this is an interesting pair and I feel sympathy for her, especially considering Flay destination in the original story

Another aspect I like about the story is, on the OC you include and give them a little personality, to give greater impetus to the story as Bristow, Shemei and the Valkyries and the other pilots you have included to show that part of the militia of Zaft is not known outside of the main protagonists and i think. out some Ovas and Mangas, are hardly mentioned.

Also note the brief mention of the origins of Phantom Pain, I can mention that aside from Mu and Stellar in Seed Destiny, I also like the stars of the Ova of Stargazer, Sven and Selene. In this chapter, you mention a little as Blue Cosmos got the conditioning of the pilots for this organization. I also saw how it differs from the altercation sitiuacion Mendel in original story based on the events of your story, in this case, I think they are more prepared and aware that in the original story.

In Chapter 24, it develop one of the events that had expected to happen: the confrontation between the Dominion and the Archangel, which was rather more intense than in the original story.

Both, in battle, as is between Le Creuset, was very different, for example, Yzak and Deaka not found and talk, besides that Yzak (I liked his moment with Flay, in trying to defend her, and as well she protects to him) has his doubts before the battle in your story. The Alliance for its planned strategy, is better prepared for battle, which can react more effectively with the addition of the new targeting system of Archangel, coupled with the knowledge they have about the area where they were, thanks to the different patrols performed.

I also liked the way Mu reacts when Heero will destroy the Dominion and confronts him, to save Natarle, which tells Mu Heero, that Heero would have done the same, if Murrue which was in danger . On his relationship with Murrue, Heero could face the situation in a different way, to disable just the 'Dominion to prevent further fighting.

Natarle also, from the previous chapter showing its conflict with her current situation, having to face her friends, in addition to the man she loves, this fact did change quite as his confrontation with Murrue, to communicate as well with them Mu; to try to make her reasoning and desist from the fight.

About Azrael, uff, really deserves him a shot with Wing Zero Twin Buster, for everything he did, besides that is in this battle where fall two of the 3 pilots from Azrael team, which is a relief more until some extent, both for the final battle, and for the attack at the Plants, which I guess is what follows in the next chapter, with Heero showdown against the Mercenaries, mentioned in the previous chapter, and it will be interesting his fight with them, especially with Cipher, by the way you describe his fighting style.

Good luck and see you in the next chapter

Ok, I still have a plenty of chapters to go through, but I love love love love love this fanfiction. Favorite Gundam fanfiction I've ever read.

Man you're fic is in my opinion better than the original seed series. That my great friend is the highest praise I give to you.

holy cow, it took me a week to get through this chapter, geez, and here i thought i could be long winded. that aside im still loving this story, cant wait to see what azriel tries to shove up people rears in the future here (willing to bet it has something to do with n-jammer cancelers) i just hope that heero can take it, what am i saying , heero's a survival maniac.

Awesome has usually.

well as always 17 stars out of 10! I know this is what 23 chapters late? but doesn't gundanium block or at least distort radar?

It's felt like a good amount of time had already passed since I last remember reading a battle scene then appreciating every facet and detail it has to offer. The clash at the debris belt in Mendel Colony is a good testament to the description: "life-like details, classic cap ship engagement and realistically refined approach".

Admittedly the aspect that made me arrive to such conclusion is the noticeable tone down of super powered OCs like Shemei Rehema and her Valkyrie unit. Finally, she was written realistically and believably, there were no more 1 is to 1 hit - kill ratio from her Lancer Darts. Her participation was vital to the overall success of the confrontation but attention on her was limited to what we could expect from supporting OCs. Her skills and capabilities are still topnotch but at least on this outing - she's presented just right and very convincing.

Antagonists - The author's way of writing the psyches of Creuset and Azrael was superb. Their scenes were written with the target of understanding their reasons, motivations and delving deep inside the twisted minds of the story's main villains. Similar to 23 and previous scenes involving these two, Operation Meteor has once again provided a crisp outlook into the diabolical minds and scheming running between Creuset and Azrael. I really liked their scenes a lot they were well done.

Kira and Mu - I'd say another strong point of the chapter. Kira's usual, irritating, self-righteous "don't want blood on my hands, you guys do the killing instead" approach was once again presented in this chapter. He's a liability to the 3SA but he's personality is in-canon. Which again reminds me the incompetence and barbaric idealism of the original SEEDs writing staff. Don't want to see a Kenshin Himura in a Gundam anymore and please, I do hope, future series won't make a whiner and crybaby like him ever again. On the other hand, this chapter was a great leap forward to Mu's character development. His bold declaration on his feelings for Natarle, his adamant stand in Heero's initial plan to blow up the Dominion and his confrontation with Creuset was amazingly portrayed. The canon pairing with Murrue was great but he's a better romantic match for Natarle because they're polar opposites. Adds the drama to that... "star-crossed lovers" feeling.

Heero and Murrue - personally my friend, I know you'll get mad at me if I don't include them in the review but I'll just sum up the best features of the main pairing for 24. Better control of emotions for Murrue BUT it is evident and strongly felt that her feelings and trust for our favorite pilot is only getting deeper. The two of them are truly a sight to see (or read) in 24, their connection, their timing/coordination and their combination while in combat was perfect. Heero's approach on taking down the Dominion was downright HEERO. It was what we could expect from him - take down the head everything will follow. 24 did not focus much on the main pairing in terms of character development or personal plot, but by no means did it lack on giving them the spotlight when it comes to the main viewpoint of the battle.

Personally and objectively looking into it, I still see the Fllay x Kira angle better than the canon and story route Lacus x Kira. It has a wider avenue and a lot more opportunities when compared to the good boy - good girl theme between Kira (cough) and Lacus.

24 was... I should say a concise chapter when compared to the author's normal inclination on releases. The pre-battle scenes were a good intro to the high pitched crescendo that was the Battle of Mendel. It was laced with elements of drama, romance and psychological which was added nicely to the main ingredients of action and adventure. Excellent job - I am definitely looking forward on the next battles with higher expectations. Kudos, my friend.

Another epic chapter as always. Can't wait to see how the next chapter will play out.

amazing ch. i enjoyed it even though i felt that Heero was a little left out in the plot.

Great battle as always the battles are getting better and better as the story progresses though what was the best battles for me in this chapter were the capital ship battles you wrote them splendidly this fight was easily worthy of Star Wars or Star Trek so great job on that and it looks like many secrets were revealed for Mu and Kira and it also looks like Heeros going to be thrusted into a more personal battle in the next chapter i can't wait

Awesome chapter, as always can't wait to read more.

Very good, I enjoyed the chapter very much! I'm also highly interested at some of the twists, minor and major, that you've thrown in here. I look forward to seeing where those will lead to.
That said, I do have one complaint. The monologues and conversations of the characters when they're not in combat are simply far too long, especially at the beginning of the chapter, to the point that it has made this chapter, dare I say, cumbersome. This seems to only apply when things are rather relaxed. When you're writing a fight scene the writing is clean and to the point with no unnecessary frills added. I won't presume to tell you to alter your writing style, but perhaps you could still trim down the details just a bit?
Other than that, the chapter was great.

That was a awesome chapter, can't wait to see what happens next!

Try to blow canon away, please.
Remember the butterflies, make sure things are way different during the destiny arc.
The armor of the Archangel should have been used on the Seed Gundams, and the Archangel should have had Phase Shift armor.
That way it wouldn't have had a inpact on the batteries.

One way to shield the Archangels blind spoys would be those defensors.
Infact, if they can get a few Verne's (civilian version on which the METEOR's were based on), equipt them with Defensors, Dragoons and such things.
Look up Starship Operators and Prince of Emo's (7/8) on Youtube
Both ships have something in it, the first a Archangel look, the second (Nadesico-C) a more Meteor kinda look with underlung launch rail.

Terminal can have so much talented people, but without a infrastructeur(?), ships and mobile suits, they wouldn't be able to do much.
A such thing would be a shuttle-Verne combo that could pull-off what the Archangel could do with that booster unit in breaking free of the Earth it's gravity pull.

Also, why didn't they try to capture the Dominion?
Shooting it's engines would have worked quite well, I bet.
As for auto-firing of the ships defencive guns, might I suggest the Mobile Dolls their control system?

Anyway, till the next time.

Damn, what a chapter. Well done writing the space battle. That was very intense.