| Reviews for Back To Black |
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Xterker23 1/6/12 . chapter 5nice |
Uhlowl22 1/6/12 . chapter 7The more I read this story the more I actually come to like Mia (even if she did abandon Sirius because I for one can't understand why anyone would leave...especially if, as you said, he's Gary Oldman). I'm thoroughly enjoying this. Keep up the good work. |
i love athrun 12/30/11 . chapter 6IT IS GOOD BUT DO A NEW CHAPTER AND KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! |
moonluver26 12/28/11 . chapter 6This is a very well written and though out story. I love the suspence as to her story(though i was a little courious as to how her story onlyy took twenty-two minutes to You proper gramstory and have wonderfull character and develpment that keep me very inrtiged and anticipating what will happen(though the early aperiance of Tedd was surprising, and I'm guessing you pourposely changed Tonk's age for the story.) Anyways keep up the good work and up date soon. |
Brook-Lucas-Fan-23 12/28/11 . chapter 6I love this chapter it was really great. I hope you update soon. |
Guest 12/28/11 . chapter 6 hurry up1 Update! dn't leave us in a cliffhanger! Please! |
PureAngelEyes 11/19/11 . chapter 5_ cool story i really liked reading it an i hope that u add more real soon cuz i cant wait for Sirius to see Mia again _ |
ImBritishNotPosh 11/1/11 . chapter 5Luv it, will Sirius and Mia meet soon? |
Nelle07 11/1/11 . chapter 5Love it! I am so happy Sirius is alive. I really would like to kick J.K. Rowling for killing more than 90% of her main cast! |
ImBritishNotPosh 10/11/11 . chapter 4Good story so far, please update |
Juliette 6/10/11 . chapter 4 This is soo good you must keep writing! I am intrigued to hear more about what will happen next and I am really looking forward to when Mia and Sirius are reunited. |
Rage908 6/5/11 . chapter 4Please write more soon! |
Steady Silence 5/29/11 . chapter 2Very good! Very thrilling, and mysterious. I love this story so much, it's original and great. But nobody's perfect, and here's some way you could improve on. In this paragraph: "What Harry needs is consolation that Sirius is going to return, no sign or hint of the possibility, be it slight, that he might not. Storming off during a fit of rage against Fudge without even a 'Goodbye' to Harry would forever weigh Sirius's heart heavy with guilt, especially if he does get sent back to a prison cell. He needs to be calm for Harry; he needs to try and set things right, even if it means bringing up memories of a painful past and a woman that broke his heart." Your saying what Harry needs. Just then and there. It might sound better if you say something like: "What Sirius realized Harry needed was consolation, consolation that he will return. Sirius tried hard to make it seem that he would not let himself start storming off during a fit of rage against Fudge. Sirius realized that if that happened Sirius wouldn't be able to say good-bye to Harry. If he got sent back to Azkaban, Sirius would be heart-heavy with guilt. To prevent this, Sirius would have to remember Harry; Which meant that Sirius would have to stay calm. Stay clam for Harry. He needs to try and set things straight, for Harry. Even if it means bringing up old memories of a painful past, and a woman that broke his heart" See how it's like what Sirius thought, not just listing what Harry needed, but you get to see what Sirius thinks. because obviously Sirius cares about Harry and doesn't want to be sent to Azkaban. To show this you have to add in that that is what Sirius is thinking. Because otherwise it's confusing. You also have to show that Sirius was thinking of Harry when he thought this because Sirius cares about Harry. I really liked this chapter. THANK YOU FOR HAVING TONKS COME ALONG! I've read so many FanFic's where people always make Tonks stay home with Teddy and miss everything. You're one of the only one's I have read where Tonks gets to do things! THANK YOU! Tonks is an amazing character and after she has Teddy so many people make her just, well give up. So, THANK YOU FOR HAVING TONKS COME ALONG AND BE AWESOME! |
ILuvOdie 5/29/11 . chapter 4i liked how Mia was recalling that memory when Sirius was just talking about it :] |
carrotsareawesome 5/28/11 . chapter 3i am completely in love with this story! update soon! |