Oh my, you've made me cry. This was so well done, I felt what Neville was going through. Please do write more.

Wonderful! I love how you've captured Neville's personality, how he's overwhelmed by his rather forceful family. And I love how cousin Eugene tries to comfort him, and gives him a bit more of his parents.

*chokes back a sob*

poor Neville

*pets the poor dear*

Egads. Mesa sweareth, yousa has this beeg beg talent for making people feel so...so...sour-y in the heart. It's a great talent, that; not making people cry out loud, but the noses get all soury and red and your eyes brim over with tears. You have a knack for lovely heart-twisting last lines, me dear. And so, PLEASE UPDATE

This is a lovely story, I got here through the Nifflers on Fictionalley. I love your Neville characterisation, it's so very sweet. And how like Neville to make light of such a nasty incident.

One thing though. Blackpool Pier isn't built over a pond or pool, it's over the North Sea. It's an enormous construction, a good 200metres long and 20M above sea level. Just so you know :-)

This is what real angst looks like. This is an awesome story, and I'm looking forward to the sequel.

An incredibly touching story. Do write some more, it's rare to see a perfectly pure story about Nevlle Lonbottom.

Good Lord, that's so sad. No wonder poor Neville has so little confidence in himself.
Personally, I think once he finds himself he'll make a terrific Auror, and even if he doesn't become an Auror he'll find a way to make his parents proud of him.
This was a wonderful story. Thank you for writing it!

'Can he still be *my* hero?'
That one line just broke my heart.
This is a lovely story. Neville is my favorite character, and it's so nice to see his character done justice to. So often he's used strictly as comedy relief, but you've taken him and made him into a real person. You rock.
On to the next chapter!

That was one of the best Neville stories that I've ever read. Angst and humor all mixed in... Poor Neville. It must be terribly to know that you're the only one different in your family - and that you can never live up to their expectations. It was wonderful. Thanks for sharing :)

This is just a lovely piece. Poor little Neville. I adore the way you've depicted him - he knows a lot more about what's going on and what his family thinks of him than they realize, which is always the way with children.

All the family members are wonderful too, with very distinct personalities. They obviously love Neville and want the best for him, but are afraid for his future. Even Uncle Algie was just trying to help, albeit in an insane sort of way. (BTW, I always thought that the Blackpool Pier Neville was referring to in PS/SS was the one in Blackpool, Lancashire, which would have meant that Uncle Algie had chucked him into the sea.)

Again, it's a wonderful story. I'm adding it to my list right now. Excellent job.

Oh, how sad! :(
I love little Neville, he's a sweetie. And so much smarter than his relatives think, too. Poor thing.
I really like the way you portraited Neville's family, especially the way they always managed to avoid The Topic. Neville's gran was very well done- at first I didn't like her, but she does care about Neville, doesn't she?
I could kill Algie, though.
Great fic!

This is such a lovely story. What a great characterization of Neville and his relatives. It's so easy to sympathesize with Neville, and I can easily imagine his "problem" being worried about by his relatives like this. Poor kid. The aunts are such fun (if tactless) characters, and Algie is just as I imagined. Even as traumatizing as the Longbottom family is for Neville, they're really a delight to read.

I really like your writing style and the dialogue, too. It's very ... old-fashioned and proper, I suppose, and it fits wonderfully with these characters.

Thanks for posting. I enjoyed this very much; I can't imagine a better depiction of Neville's childhood.

--Jenny

aw poor Neville. That was a really sweet fic. Very good job. Have you posted it at Fictionalley.org yet?

Good Neville fics are in short supply. Good Neville NON-SLASH fics are even rarer. Good job! Please continue!