*shakes head* did I just read Echizen in doubles? Okay ... Could have been a better conculsion, more drawn out I mean, but its good for what it is.

I still can't get over Echizen in doubles ...

interesting ... Echizen choking on his soft drink. Fuji's got to tell Oishi! Or Taka by accident ... or Echizen just to stir up Oishi.

Lol kaidoh supporting Momo, the world can spin upside down then ...

OOOOO, tensing up here. Very good building of tension. You'll have to excuse me for lack of lengthy review as just finished travelling a long distance ...

Atobe works for Eiji? Wow ... I've read some things but not anything like that. Hmmm ... what has Oishi done?

MOU! I don't want Eiji to go to Japan

Mou ... I didn't mean it that way. I meant the dream Oishi didn't help in making Eiji better.

Anyway! YAY YAY YAY YAY! I had wondered where you had gone. Interesting twist ... Eiji in America. Nope! If Eiji goes to America I will personally kidnap him and drag him back to Seigaku! I will, I will, I will

Hmmm ... Oishi making Eiji ill ... that I never thought of. Grammar was off at the start of the story but it was better at the end.

Your making me think deeply now ... I might actually complete my story even with this stupid laptop I have (sorry, I rant and rave about how bad this laptop is, it really is)

I wasn't say it was boring and if you didn't say you didn't have any ideas I would have said you were leading up to something.

Grammar wise - one or two words here. Literally, the tense is perfect (don't quote me on that, bad night sleeping and bad laptop screen flickering at me) so very good.

Eiji sounds like he's coming under a lot of stress from Oishi appearing and the amount of work O_O I don't get that much in uni. Possibly you could use the stress idea ...

Anyway waiting for the next chapter eagerly!

a slippage at the end and a few words missing here and there but boy this story is very good in grammar compared to previous stories. Still interested how you take this story, not the most interesting of chapters and it made me smile to think Eiji has a fan club in his high school. Keep it up!

interesting ... very interesting and it was actually a very well almost correct chapter! I REALLY REALLY LIKE! GIVE ME MORE! Please?

OKay, I'm back! Laptop still not repaired or changed, so no update on my story. But I'm back reading yours! Your spelling is good in this but it could be better, I'm interested on how you take this plotline. Tenses again a small problem but you've improved in leaps and bounds!