hello. me again. i read this a real long time ago, and i remember liking it. love how gritty it is.

this is an awesome story!

Just a thing to improve - there's a bit of confusion after Remiel speaks. The second line of dialogue (keep an eye out for us). I don't think that's remiel speaking. maybe you'd want to make that its own line of dialogue.

~rose

This is brilliant!!

That was a great story, a perfect sequel to intentions. It has a unique way of telling a story, and a style that can be taken awe of. Its well done, and a nice change of pace towards the other ficts out there.

Another great piece of writing. Keep writing!

Hey, I have just read an article about buckyballs and i'm impressed how you implemented them into the story; nearly nothing is invented, this rather science than fiction...

i liked your hdm fanfics so much that i have put links to them on my site (http://madrat.net/his_dark_materials).
they're really cool!

This is a very good story. I hope you plan to write a sequel to it.

This is a truly exceptional piece. You have done an incredible job sewing together the characters and combining the plotlines. Pullman's characters (Will, Mary, Lyra) are portrayed in a very real way. You didn't stray from their personalities at all. Your own creations (Giancarlo, Guilietta, Judy, Lizzie) only accentuate the rich storyline you set up. I only hope you continue with a third series, and a fourth, and a fifth as well. And when you believe this is done, I highly reccomend you begin writing an original novel. You obviously have the skill, creativity and diligence to do so. May the road rise up to meet your feet and the sky bend down to bless your head.

Leefta

I said that Mary had worked at CERN - the big supercollider in Switzerland (actually, it's so big it's in 3 countries!). She's pretty clued up in high-energy particle physics, so knowing how to drive a tokamak (there aren't very many in the world and she would surely be aware of the one that was practically on her doorstep) wouldn't have been so much of a big deal.

The B&K ITG is fictional, except that B&K are a IRL *very* respected instrument manufacturer.

Ceres

Awww, that's so nice of you! I didn't really do much except review... and make inacurite predictions of what would happen... and do a lot more reading than writing...

And Mary's uncanny knoledge of the JET kind of unnerves me. Is this pure scientific instinct of physics or something more? Because she knew *everything*, it seemed, and it weirded me out.

Sequel? Well, I wasn't expecting one for Intentions, so go ahead and surprize me. (I hope!)

MKVB

Very nice. I think this one was even better than the last. I seriously loved all the real science involved; that was probably my favorite element. 'Twas brilliant! Any more HDM stories in your future? ^_~

This, my friend, was awesome. Absolutely awesome. 200% great, and I mean it.

Kicks asses!

This is totally awesome--the first HDM fic I've ever seen that accurately uses the physics involved--and it makes my HDM fic look like crap! ^_^ This was so good. Love it...

By the way, thanks for volunteering to help with my formatting but I finally got the dang thing to work.

Excellent! Please write more soon! I love this story. I think it may be even better than the one before it.