Cherry doesn't move into the caravan straight away, she moves in after Honey tips her things out the window. But otherwise, very good!

Nice entry :)

hmmm. Interesting. I sort of hoped this would be something that would help me cement my vague feelings that Honey is rather misunderstood, or at least worthy of a little sympathy, but sadly no such luck. I think you are being a bit hard on honey here. She must have some redeeming features, but you have made her rather unbelievably nasty - a kind of super-self-centred ogre type with delusions of granduer and irrational hatred of everyone except herself and her father. I mean, she is the nasty character in the book, so a lot of that IS right, but perhaps not to the extent you have taken it? You might want to think about that :)

Great start. Update asap.

Gemma

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