Reviews for Magatama Tsubasa
sakana-chan63 6/12/11 . chapter 3
weird. wah haha! i know the identeties of your friends!
purplepjs 6/8/11 . chapter 3
So basically what we are looking at is an AU of AJ? Phoenix still has his badge. I like that a lot!

I really like the plot of this fic. It makes sense that Maya would be hesitant to channel anyone again after what happened with Dr Grey and of course she would want Phoenix there for support.

This latest chapter is the most well written out of the three. I can tell from your writing style that you're a very energetic, excitable person and there are a lot of extremes and strong reactions to things from your characters. Your story is quite fast paced, but I like the way that it has slowed a little within this last chapter, taking note more of the smaller details.

One of the best pieces of advice that I ever recieved from a creative writing teacher was that "A moment can contain a thousand words." Taking notice and describing the things that are happening, thoughts and feelings makes for a well fleshed out story and I can see that your writing skills are developing in that direction.

I also commend you for writing Phoenix in the first person. It's spectacularly hard to maintain.

I look forward to reading more.
Naoko Suki 6/7/11 . chapter 3
I can see why he doesn't want to say anything yet. I'm sure he would want to tell Maya before he told someone else. And he still isn't sure about how Maya feels! I'm thinking this wait for her channeling to finish it taking a lifetime for him! ;) Thank you!
Naoko Suki 6/7/11 . chapter 2
Ahh Those Elders. So rude! Nice is a FINE attorney. I wonder who that creepy guy was on the train?
Naoko Suki 6/7/11 . chapter 1
Aww Nick! I'm glad you're over Iris! AS YOU SHOULD BE.
Blue Deity 6/6/11 . chapter 3
Liked the conversation between Phoenix and the medium, good work

Giving Phoenix and mixed heritage was a good idea
sakana-chan 6/1/11 . chapter 2
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Two Minutes Past Dawn 5/31/11 . chapter 2
H-haruki? You picked the name Haruki?

If this Haruki was in high school with a pair of yellow headphones, a (girl)friend named Kyonkyo and the last neme Suzumiya, I'd squeal. If you have no idea what I'm talking about...nevermind.
James Birdsong 5/30/11 . chapter 2
Oh it might be called awesome
Feyfangirl 5/30/11 . chapter 2
an intriguing start, I look forward to more :D
Blue Deity 5/29/11 . chapter 2
Interesting with the guy on the train and props for making an Engarde reference.

The part with Maya curled up on Phoenix's chest was great
Tatsu-Ah-Rei 5/25/11 . chapter 1
I like it so far but the one thing that made me confused were the dialogues. Don't group different characters' dialogues into the same paragraph.

The rule to writing is: Each dialogue should have their own paragraph.
GamerFTW 5/25/11 . chapter 1
Oooh! Sounds really good. Can't wait for the next update. ;) Wonder what will happen?
Blue Deity 5/23/11 . chapter 1
Hah, really liking how this story flows, seems pretty light hearted now, but I get the feeling it's not going to stay that way.

The first person is perfect so far and the characteristation is perfect :D
sakana-chan 5/22/11 . chapter 1
awesome as always XD
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