|Reviews for Looking Toward Home: A Master and Commander Story|
| ScornedxRose 10/2/11 . chapter 1
This was pretty good.
There were some areas I was confused in, but that's because you didn't put an indicator for the scene changes.
Other than that, good story. :)
| Pierre Gringoire 6/1/11 . chapter 1
First off, the story itself is technically well-written. I would have broken it up into chapters to make it easier on the readers, but that's just me.
The content however...I'm not going to address the numerous historical and canonical problems with this story. I'd be here all day and I suspect you don't care at all. I'm going to focus on the main problem: Maddie. Maddie is, I'm sorry to say, the most unlikeable OC I've ever seen in this fandom who wasn't intended to be a villain. She is self-centered, entitled, whiny and ungrateful. She showed no genuine sorrow for Warley, except for how it related to her. She did show slight concern for Hollom, but forgot about him when she saw how handsome Pullings looked, and never bothered to reach out to him in any way. When Maturin was shot was the worst of it. Instead of concern over the man who saved her from the streets and gave her training as a surgeon's mate, a man she should have some sort of bond with, she's more concerned with how his death would effect HER.
Second, I grew very tired very quickly of how much Maddie complained about her lot in life and how she didn't want to be pressured into a proper life. Understandable, if she was a poor urchin or if she'd grown up a sheltered rich girl. But Maddie's a Surgeon's Mate in the Royal Navy, an unheard of position for women in the 18th/19th century. She has more freedom and more opportunities than most women in the time period could ever dream of already, but she wants to throw it away and go back to piracy because helping save lives is 'too proper' for her. Less than sympathetic.
Finally, for all the posturing about how she doesn't want to be a 'proper, docile woman' Maddie does very little to improve her position, other than complain to Pullings about it. She actually has done very little to influence the course of her own life herself. She was forced into piracy by her father, saved at the last second by a male captain, plucked from the streets by Maturin and finally, has her problem solved by Pullings, with little input from her. When a character is so dependent on men throughout the story, it's laughable to read about how they don't want to be a docile woman.
I could have forgiven all of this though, if these character flaws were INTENTIONAL. If Maddie had been presented as a flawed character who needed to overcome her flaws, she would have been an interesting character to write about. As she is though, I couldn't root for her in anyway, except maybe root for her to get keel-hauled. As a romantic heroine, Maddie is pathetic.