   Irena K 4/11/02 . chapter 7And again: oooooh...
Couple technical problems. A few typos and dropped words here and there. You also have a habit of switching tenses without warning. It's not horrendously bad but it does distract from what is otherwise a fine story.
Speaking of which, brava for not only taking a character that appeared in exactly one episode of the series (though he does seem to get a surprising amount of fanfic considering) and developing him further, but also for creating a character that may have easily turned into a Mary-Sue if she hadn't been so completely, wonderfully loony tunes. Well done. |
| Cu Sith 4/8/02 . chapter 5 I feel kinda sorry for Pel, don't you? |
| Luna 4/7/02 . chapter 5 Ooh, nice twist. Pel is crazy, but that's what makes the story good! Great job! |
| Luna 4/6/02 . chapter 3 I like this story a lot. Very well written. Hope to read more soon! :D |
| Mistoffelees 4/6/02 . chapter 2 YES YES YES! You know I wuv this story. Hurry and post more. I..um..wanna know what happens..cough |
| Cu Sith 4/6/02 . chapter 2 *Sniff* How could you leave it there? HOW COULD YOU! |
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