This was great! D I can't wait to see the new chapter 3 I really enjoyed the story and I hope you continue with it. and I think the episode he eats toast was forever phantom, but i'm not 100% sure. /

Hey! I finally have time to read this. And I am sooo glad I did—this is wonderful! Really, absolutely wonderful. I said that your Phantom torture, suffering, sacrificial-ness is really well done in your other stories, but this one just outstrips them all! I love it so much! The emotions run really strong and the plot is really, really intriguing. You also don’t rush through things, but you let us savor everything that happens as it happens—thank you so much for doing that.

Grammar is really good for the most part. Just a few commas here and there could be added or removed, but that was no big deal.

I was a little confused by Skulker’s emotions, his almost frantic wish to help Phantom once Pariah was in his sarcophagus again. I think that he’s shown that he wouldn’t want Danny to just die, but I don’t think that he would really show his care as much as he did. It was just a short line, but it struck me as strange. I was expecting more of a dry remark that, ‘hey, Frostbite, you do realize that he wouldn’t make it to your place before he died, right?’

I really love the part where Maddie and Jack are getting ready to treat Phantom and realize that he’s breathing and has bones and isn’t at all what they had always thought him to be. It was really realistically done, unlike many passages I’ve read lately where Maddie figures out that he isn’t all that he seems.

It has a lot of potential and I think you will do great things with it in the following chapters. I’m so glad that you decided to continue this! Now onto the other chapters!

Sapphireswimming

aw...

you just maid my day! X3

4 chapters and 60 reviews. Pretty good, if you ask me B)

Love it! I hope that the ring will play some sort of part in the rest of the story.

There's so much emotion in this story! 3 There's a few spelling errors, but overall it's incredible. I can picture their faces, imagine the feelings rushing through them at any given point, and their actions/reactions are completely believable. Great imagery!

I also agree that Danny would need to eat... ghost form or no. No matter what form he's in, he's still HALF ghost, HALF human, and thus has qualities of both.

Wonderful job! :D

I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS STORY! It just amazes me every time i read it! The way you put in the descriptions and the emotion in the characters makes it so real, and i can picture everything just like it was a movie but better because i know what they're thinking! haha awesome job and i cant wait to see what happens next!

I liked this. Nice story.

This. Made. My. Day.

Honestly, this is superb.

Woah Danny has been given the ring? XD loved all the moments in the chapter. I would have thought that frostbite was a hard character to portray but you've don't it really successfully intact you made it seem easy XD Update soon!

OMG TOTALLY AWESOME! Maddie is getting so close to the truth!

this is great. keep up the good job.

U must update!

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Omg finish the next chapter I wanna see his mom find out hurry up already kk :D

This. Was. Epic!

Fangirls, XD