This story is awesome. Just thought you'd like to know. And I was wondering if you were a Harry Potter fan? I happened to notice you used Argus and Filtch for the men lol :p

interesting, i hope you continue this

goos start.I'm update soon

A rather cliche story begining. Good spelling and grammar. Very typical (and insipid) damsel in distress character with a side of Mysterious!Power, but it's still early in the story, so there's plenty of time for you to take it past that. I'm holding back on labelling her Mary Sue for now. I'm also confused as to why they're all 'mesmerized' with a bloodied up, sexually assaulted girl. I hope its not because she's beautiful with silver hair and purple eyes or something- that's just silly and doesn't make sense, besides.

You have potential, so it'd be nice to see you make this fic good.

I look forward to see where you take this story. Update soon! ]