Very interesting. There should be more seb/will stories Can't wait for your next update

Update please!

This is amazing! I hope there is another lemon with SebbyXWill or even GrellXWill. And as a Undertaker Cosplayer, I love the way you potrayed him. :D Snake, Will, and Undertaker are my fave characters. Will is, in my opinion, the uke of the series. I like the uptight people as uke's... they are so cute!

I like the intentions and plot of this story but there are many, many things that you need to improve on. One, your grammar is nearly painful to read as you are missing countless words, awkward phrasings and various spelling errors such as "fallow" when you mean follow. That is pure carelessness of the English language as those are easy things to fix if you simply reviewed and over looked your own chapter or even had someone had to look it over that has a good grasp on the language. Your story is also very jumpy and confusing at some points. There is little fluidity with your story and is very choppy. Simple sentences that connect the chapters together would make your story much better over all. On a good note, your characterization is fairly accurate and they are in character. I think if you spent more time on your chapters and thought them out, paying careful attention to them, your story will improve greatly.

Wow you're killing them awful fast,huh? Will has quite a predicament on his hands. Yaaay Ronnie got away. Love it!

YAY! I've waited for this TTwTT It's an amazing chapter! poor grell... mostly poor ronald but i love Undertaker's sick side :D The wait was well worth it! Can't wait to see what happens to William in the next chapter 3

Bladion

NOOOO! What is this cliffhanger? Your stories are nice aside from a few errors here and there.

UPPPPPDATEEEE!

wtf jus hapened?

undertaker's baddass again!

lol, your on crack

PLEASE MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER!

please make the next chapter! 33 I must see what happens to william next!

I cant wait for the next chapter!

I wonder what happened to Ciel. Come to think of it, I wonder if Ciel knows what Sebas is doing to the Shinigami...hmm. Still its weird to think Will would ever be happy to see Grell. That fire is seriously scary sounding...Love it!