|Reviews for Another Witch?|
| A2463 7/7/12 . chapter 10
Absolutely love it! Really love it!
| xXseleniumXx 7/3/11 . chapter 7
There was one spot where you said the word "eyes" way too many times too close to each other. And sometimes the characters tend to state the obvious. But that's my only criticism.
You're doing a good job at slowing things down to the appropriate speed, so that it's not like "and then we did this. And then we did this..." Keep going.
| xXseleniumXx 7/3/11 . chapter 6
omg that last paragraph reminded me of that movie: "Shut up! Silence! Shut the fuck up!" lol and it would appear Google Translate has failed you this time...haha!
But other than that I love it! A few kind of awkward phrases, but if you'd written another draft of this it would've been perfect. Keep it up.
| xXseleniumXx 6/24/11 . chapter 5
best chapter yet!
| xXseleniumXx 6/8/11 . chapter 4
pretty clean. Does it get dirtier? lol
| xXseleniumXx 6/8/11 . chapter 3
I like it. cute. I think things happened too fast, though. You need to slow it down, be more descriptive. Otherwise the reader loses their sense of immersion.
| xXseleniumXx 6/8/11 . chapter 2
That depressed me. But that's what you meant, right? Idk if the girl would've really survived if she was beaten for HOURS, but it was definitely powerful.
| xXseleniumXx 6/8/11 . chapter 1
I really liked the French you used in this. It made it come alive. Also, I think it really captures how superstitious and irrational the church was back then.