Schön...absolutely Schön. A short, yet amazing story. I loved it from the first sentence to the last. You did an amazing job at capturing all the characters from a different aspect without changing who they were as characters. I feel privileged in having the honor of reading your story my friend.

Beautiful so far. Can defiantly see Sirius being "one for the older ladies" And I got mushy on the Nike thing. I'm sentimental like that though. I love this story!

Let me first say that I found the premise of this story extremely good and very refreshing, which is hard to find on this site tese days.

I really liked that so many characters were in this story, especially so because they all played a part and weren't in it for the sake of it.

I think it was a little too obvious who the father was. If that's what you were going for, then good work. But if you were hoping for suspense, then I'm afraid that it didn't really work that well.

I think there was room for more character development here. At times it felt like you were starting to develop certain characters, but then you moved right onwards, and I feel that may have hurt the story. There is absolutely nothing wrong with more character development.
That being said, I think that you wrote the story well and I found very, very few grammatical and spelling mistakes which is always great.

There were a few questions that I was left with, however. Why did Harry wait so long to clean out Snape's house? What caused Lucius' death? Why does Krum have a castle?

I really enjoyed reading this fic.

Beletrium

i really like the idea that draco has a mystery sister! great story!

Thank you so much for writing this. I love your writing style. It felt like it could've actually happened. I'm sort of sad that it ended so quickly, but I'm sure you have your reasons. It made me cry so hard, as I have just seen Deathly Hallows part 2. Keep up you're work! I'll be sure to read more of your stories!

Megan

Hey, and welcome to your first official Fanfiction Idol review!

So, this was quite refreshing. It wasn't the typical 'random daughter!' fic, which was nice.
And for grammar&spelling, I honestly didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes, really, so nice job there. It was nice to find a fic without constant grammar mistakes.

It wasn't too original, as I've seen this plot so many times before- one of the Harry Potter characters has a brother or sister that they don't know about. But you sort of made it your own, so props for that!

In terms of believability, it wasn't insanely believable, but of course, it's the first chapter. The plotholes may have been explained in future chapters!
Overall, this was just a great introduction to what looks to what will make way to a great fic. It was well-written, and I adore the relationship you show between Narcissa and Draco, though I'm not sold on the plot.

Lovely job, and thank you for entering.

A great ending. Well done!

Oh, jeez. I choked up a little over her inheritance. That he would leave her his potions book...if she had grown up with him, you know she would have learned potions at his knee.
Lovely stuff.

Arachne is so poised; she really does remind me of Narcissa. I like how she doesn't really need Viktor's protection, too.

What would Snape leave her? On to the next chapter!

Awww. I know this isn't a shippy fic, but my Dramione-loving heart enjoyed their interaction in this chapter.

I breathed a sigh of relief over Draco's thoughts in this chapter. It galls me (personal preference, here) when Draco calls/thinks of Hermione as "mudblood" post-DH. It's like he went through the war learning nothing and not growing at all. To see him controlling himself here, trusting her, and interacting with her with some measure of respect and courtesy makes me happy.
That's the wonderful thing about Draco as a character: no matter what mistakes he makes, there's always hope for him.

Hmm, the plot thickens.

Hagrid's accent can be a pain to write, but you handled it well.

Oh, what an interesting wrinkle!

Again, your characterizations, this time of Harry and Hermione, are perfect. I could almost hear them talking.

As an aside, I don't know why, but the thought of Snape's home abandoned, and of Harry being the one to take on the burden of clearing it out, makes me very emotional. The poor man is unloved even in death.(

This is a great beginning! Your characterizations of Draco and Narcissa are spot on. I love how Narcissa keeps her spark even as her health fades.

Ooooh! This is so intriguing! I love your writing style.

Great Job! clouds with silver linings