Well done!

In the opening paragraph you set the scene in a way that I could picture it in my mind. I am unfamiliar with the anime this story is based on so I will judge you on your merits at telling me the story.

I can feel your characters pain. Even with a 35mm camera it can be difficult to capture the moment!

This is well written. I tip my hat to you!

Dale (AKA 94saturn)

Heh heh. Mighty good, young-un! (Or perhaps you are wrinkled with age...Curse generalizations!) Anyway, you penned/typed a fine fanfiction, and should be proud of your excellent portrayal of Mr. Tatewaki. Great job!

Lol. I like it.

Ah, exactly what I needed! This one really served to cheer me up! Applauds!
You wrote "sunset" instead of "sunrise" once, but other then that, it was perfect. I think I'll add it to my Favorites, actually.

you've written this story really well, and i like the characterization! very good! ^_^

Oh that crazy Kuno and his crazy poetic ways. ^_^ Cute little story! Very interesting Ranma bit too. Continue writing, please! -Chibikat

^^ I liked the way you wrote this scene. It portrayed Kuno and Ranma in an interesting manner. ^^