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Mmerleavy Ellesmerea 11/7/11 . chapter 7Good night,author-san Whaaa...i love this one like i love the another fics you've made! It's good as always ehehe Hey hey when this one will be updated? Update soon please,i'll waiting for this and your other fics... Keep writing,ganbatte With smile, Chiko the Silver Demon. |
AissriKawaii 9/21/11 . chapter 7A new chapter ! Super ! First impression : I definitely feel sorry for Ciel, having to be taken care of by those three ! It's just horrible D: ! Ciel is as cute as ever ! (and he doesn't like when people tell him so) And I'm I the one imaging things or Ciel is getting perverted èwé ? There are much passages where he thinks of sex for instance. Oh I never thought you'll make a discussion about Yaoi on your fanfic' XD (and Ciel knows what it is U/U) The nightmare is, I think, the best part of the chapter. "I'll be giving you something fun"...I start thinking Ciel is being raped on his nightmare (which are may be the future). And I think the one behind all that is Sebastian because of his laugh, the fact that he seems to know Ciel and sometimes in the past chapters, I don't know how to say it but I find him kind of...suspect. He's too kind and...perverted U_U (I start missing Alois ;_;) Errr...Right now I don't have particular ideas but you can use the ones I posted on the review I made for the 6th chapter ) Well then, good luck for the continuation. \o/ |
AissriKawaii 8/25/11 . chapter 6Different chapter this time, more based on CielxSebastian ! In this chapter, Ciel gets closer to Sebastian. He starts being interested in him. The passage when he asks him about pets is so cute. Oh and I was sure Sebastian loved cats til having at least one ! He's so cute ! Taking care of an abused animal, that's so brave ! / I was like OMG O/O when Ciel told Seb' to wash him off XD He's making good progress ! Alois told the police about Ciel's nightmare so they came to investigate. And the poilice are...the shinigamis XD ! That's interesting. But are they gonna be real shinigamis ? I start to think that there is a little fantastic in here when I see Sebastian's eye glowing crimson O_O. Sebastian is really hungry in this chapter, the game he proposed to Ciel is kinda...hot ! (But I wanted it to last a little more *Q* ! **perverted soul**) And then he kissed him. What the f*ck is wrong with this doctor ? XD **I want the same** Ciel is not insensitive to that and he starts to think about...his "feelings". He's like in love with both Alois and Sebastian but doesn't understand. He can't even know whether he loves or just likes them. Poor Ciel T-T Now good and bad points. Let's begin with the bad ones, it's better èwé : -There are little mistakes of spelling. I don't remember well which ones because I read the chapter yesterday u_U" -And... **suspense** the long wait XD ! No I'm joking it's not important w' Good points : -The police. It was a good idea to make them interfer. (Even though they just told Ciel to tell his nightmare again altough they knew it) -Ciel trying to understand his feelings. It's very important. (Not like -ridiculous- fanfics when the uke tells his seme that he loves him overnight. -_-') -Your remarks XD ! I laughed so hard when I read "Yes, Ciel knows what dirty dreams are xD" -Ciel's cuteness ! He's so kawaii ! I want to hold him till he suffocates. **Still remembering of the end when he yawned and said "Time for a nap.."** o Ideas for the continuation...**thinking** : Maybe Ciel will avoid both Alois and Sebastian or just one of them because of all his (their) perverted manners. If he avoids just one - When he stays with the other it doesn't change a thing because he'll be as (perverted..**SBAF**) strange as the other. I don't know if I'm making myself clear u_U If he avoids both of them - I dunno maybe he'll stay with other patients or he'll investigate about his past/school/Sebastian or Alois (because he heard/saw strange things about them) But I think these two ideas will be more appropriated for next chapters not right one. Ideas for chapter 6... More informations about the nightmare and it's meaning and/or the strange school **curious** And more CielxAlois and CielxSebastian. Both pairings to destabilize him :D or just one pairing so that he starts to forget the other and then in next chapters something happens between him and the other so he starts to love him as well. Well, I think I'm done. (Wow, a long review again -') Good luck for the continuation ;) |
H 7/27/11 . chapter 5 Don't worry, the Alois/Ciel is sweet. Sadly I'm sick and on a strict diet at the moment. Your descriptions of food are making my mouth water. _ |
AissriKawaii 7/27/11 . chapter 5Kyaaah ! You used my ideas éwè ! When I saw you uploaded the new chapter I rushed myself and read it ! This is what we can call a "Ciel/Alois chapter" ! **so happy** \o/ OMG ! The passage when Alois comes to "comfort" Ciel was sooo cute ! And when he kisses his forehead too ! "And I've been starting to like Mister Trancy" O/O **dies from a heart attack** q So, Ciel was the baby type that cries a lot ? Kawaii ! XD I didn't understand when they talked about the Sunshine Elementary, so Alois and Ciel went to the same school ? . That seems interesting. Plus, Sebastian says he never heard about that school...hmmm, kinda mysterious all that...OwO I thought the novel's extract that Ciel was reading was a memory but no. Fiouu! I'm relieved, I thought the "demonic presence" was Sebastian and that he was trying to punish Ciel, like "Oh nooo ! You're spending too much time with Alois ! I cannot accept that because I'm jealous ! But now, you're gonna be mine ! Hahahahaaa" o_O' Unlike in the manga, here, Sebastian seems very kind and attentioned to Ciel. The pasage when he thought that Ciel must not keep the things that trouble him hidden is very touching. :D Ciel's nightmare is terrifying ! O_O It makes me think about the hypothesis that the "accident" wasn't a real accident, like "someone" planned it and that "someone" is (was) an ennemy of the Phantomhive... Too much questions but so unsure ! Well, thank you (and bravo) for this chapter. Oh and I was very pleased to help (a little). It's rare for me to read english fanfics that aren't OS so it means I love your fic a lot. If you need more help just ask ! I would gladfully give you a hand ! |
DustyTears 7/26/11 . chapter 5Those bastards! How dare they let Ciel find out that way! Awwww Ciels so cute with his stubborn attidude. An amazing chapter and update! Hope you update soon! Now all we need is Sebastian to get jealous! Live Long And Prosper! |
AissriKawaii 7/13/11 . chapter 4Wow ! I read all the chapters and I'm actually fond of your story ! I so loved it w The characters' personalities are well respected and your writing is super. Alois */* OMG I laughed so hard when he asked Ciel about his sexuality and him masturabting or not xD And the Alois running his hand through Ciel's locks and Ciel "mmmm"ing O/O No, really I adored ! The only thing I'll reproach you is that Ciel lost his parents a few days ago se he cannot act like nothing went on, well he has his heart beating faster when he thinks about them and also makes nightmares but I think it's not enough, maybe I'm wrong but that's what I personnaly think. Maybe you can make that Ciel does'nt (really) believe his parents are dead so when something prooves it (an article on the internet/tv, a formular, nurses talking about poor he is by being orphan...) he understands it and goes to WC to cry, Alois (or Sebastian even though Alois is my favourite) asks him if he's okay (because he has been locked on for a little while) and then you can have a sligh Ciel x Alois (or Ciel x Sebastian, depending you will see him). :D Err...I don't really have ideas for next chapters but as both Sebastian or Alois must stay with Ciel to watch him, they can decide of some activities (not sexual...or not but not yet *w*) or Ciel can meet other patients, I dunno OxO Well, I hope I helped a little and that you'll excuse my mistakes because I'm not English but French X Hope you'll publish the fourth chapter soon. Your fanfic rocks ! |
DisguisingQueen 6/29/11 . chapter 3 I think this is interesting so far. please do continue :D |
dreamscometrue410 6/29/11 . chapter 3i can just imagine sebby like a doctor and alois as a nurse ! |