I thought that your inspiration for this story was a nice nod to the fanon surrounding Jason and birds, but I've read several of your stories tonight and I think that you tend to over-rely on dialogue (particularly in this story) and don't focus enough on emotions or the character's actions.

I also feel that this story was originally two separate ones that you just sort of forced together. (I'm talking about where Caitlyn tells off Laurel and then it goes to her slumping over the mixing board because Nate's being a perfectionist). They don't mesh -super well-, but it works well enough as the action is focused in one location.

I do love the back-and-forth dialogue though. That is a very good strength to have in your possession.

I think this is my 5 or 6th time reading this story. It's just so cute and I love Caitlyn. She's just so sassy that it makes me laugh because we all have that person in our lives who is just like that! I love how she just takes what's hers. Sorry for just NOW reviewing. I think I'll read it again... and maybe 6 or 8 more times. :)

update soon plzzzzzzzzzz:D

I love this story!

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awwww, I adore that ending. Well, all of it. But that last little moment is so precious. Great work with this one! Love it! Favoriting!

funny and cute, I love it!now I'm off to read all of the other oneshots you've posted recently that keep appearing in my inbox ;D