I don't wanna be rude, but...that fanfic is so...odd.

Can you write another story/stories?

SO soryy for my critique!

I have a little question for you - Do you know, who am I?

If you don't know, you can see it at my nickname.

I'm the BIGGEST Fangirl of 4 coolest video games serieses:

Sonic The Hedgehog

Ratchet & Clank

Jak & Daxter

Sly Cooper

.

If you are the Biggest Fan of theme like me...:

If you are not...:

I think you're understand me, do ya?

Have something to say about this?