Tiamat needing help from Sheila? What is the world coming to? Dude, I totally like your story.

Good story so far.

Yay, you're back! I thoughtit wasa great chapter! Hey, apologies are not necessary when real-life responsibilities demand your attention. Your life should always come first. And ugh! Writer's block! I's hell,I know that for an agonizing fact! But you've posted once again, and that is a step forward!

I'm really enjoying this story! I hope you can continue soon.

Good chapter. I only caution that it feels a bit rushed. Pace it out and let it build, perhaps. Things feel like they're happening just a tad too fast.

I like what you're doing with Hank. The only thing better than evil Hank is broken Hank, and I have a feeling that's coming. :)

Oh dear, I'm so nervous!I gotta know what's going to happen next! Great chapter!

You're doing a really good job on your first story. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Nice Hank/Sheila moment.

The Sheila/Tiamat dialogue felt a bit off to me, though. Tiamat seems a creature of few words. She wouldn't say things like, "all I know is . . ." or "if they get their hands on it. . ." or the "haven't you noticed" line. And I can't imagine Sheila saying, "swear upon your own power". It just didn't come across as something she'd say. Things like that can interrupt a reader because we tend to hear dialogue in our mind's ear and what doesn't strike true sticks out and disturbs the flow.

Also, would the possessor of all the rings really have more power than Tiamat and Venger combined? Why didn't Tiamat destroy the rings long ago, or bury the temple in rubble? If she could so easily go directly into the rings' chambers, she could have at least stolen them and likely destroyed them - surely she would have hidden them far from human reach.

Of course, these questions might be answered in future chapters, so I'll wait and see. :-)

I'm liking Hank's growing determination — more like the growing corruption. I like seeing the golden boy brought down. *grins evilly*

Suffer? Why, its like needing to pee really bad after drinking three cherry Cokes but the one-and-only-bathroom is occupied! A nightmare! But that's what good writing does. JK Rowling knows all about this, I suppose!

It's always the quiet ones who suffer most, the ones that hold their feelings in that explode the loudest. Ica nt' wait to read what else you have in store for Sheila and Hank. Think Sheila would go all Dark Phoenix on them?

Power corrupts? Good chapter, it's interesting to see how the prospect of power affects each of the young ones. And that the least affected/interested so far seems to be Eric.

Ah, Hank has tasted power, and found it . . . deliciously sweet.

I love the description of the rings. That's cool.

Sheila's definitely not ignored now. She has the attention of Tiamat! This is getting interesting!

The mighty Tiamat needs help from Sheila? Wow! THAT is going to be some good story-telling, writer! Heh heh, if Sheila became the only human to ever bond with big mama that would be priceless! Fantastic chapter!

Awesome chapter! Love the H/S parts of course. The longer the chapter, the more satisfying the read! I bet a time is coming when Sheila will never be ignored again!

The first chapter was NOT poor! And don't be nervous! Your writing is better than most on this site. I don't even bother reviewing a lot of fanfic because I see no use in it (as in, too many mistakes to bother mentioning to the author). When I do review, it's because I like the story and/or see talent and potential in the writer.

I like the contrasting thoughts from Hank and Sheila as they remember the past. Nice touch. Good attention to detail throughout, actually.

Need line dividers between changing scenes. You can insert them in this site's editor. Also wanted to mention that I got 5 updates for chapter 2's having been added. Each had a different word count. :-) Edit first, then post. I set a chapter aside for a week and then come back to it with a clear(ish) head for spotting errors I made. I go over it many times for editing and correcting before posting it. Measure twice, cut once, so to speak.

Cool Indiana Jones reference. ;-) And excellent cliffhanger! This chapter is much better. It's like you were just messing with us in the first chapter. You can write quite well. Here's the proof!

P.S. I can't respond to your reviews or send you messages because your PMs are turned off.

Great beginning! I can't wait to read more! Even if you only have a few readers, keep on going (But you have more readers, they don't all comment like they ought to, but they are there!)Love the Hank and Sheila parts the most: I've been 'shipping them for YEARS, I can't get enough. So keep up the awesome work, and I'll 'see' you next chapter, 'kay?