|Reviews for Paradox|
| Guest 9/24/12 . chapter 7
Really amazing story so far! Having played RIFT for over a year now I had wondered if there was any fan fiction created for either Defiant or Guardian. This is a very well-written story with nice intrigue, strong primary character interactions, and some great explainations for how characters in the game might view the RIFT experience. I look forward to more chapters in this story and will recommend it to my friends who also play the game. Great job!
| marekarawn 8/4/12 . chapter 7
a bit of editing/revision wouls be a very good thing - the top middle paragraphs are a little confusing.
Changing 'voice' doesn't mean going from clear writing to jumbles.
| marekarawn 8/4/12 . chapter 6
opt for something other than "fuck"
| marekarawn 8/4/12 . chapter 1
Very good begining - though I got confused as to the protagonist's and the 1st tech's 'race' in this paragraph: (...) I found myself staring face to face with a middle aged Eth man, who was smiling as if he had just defeated Regulos all by himself. While I cannot claim that I am like a sister to the Eth, I was quite close to them for the majority of my life (...).
I assume the tech is Kelari and not Eth.
| Bondubras of Devoncroix 3/4/12 . chapter 7
That was an interesting take on soul ascension. It actually makes sense, too.
Looking forward to more.
| Mijarion 10/14/11 . chapter 7
Update! You need to update! Please! :)
| Mijarion 10/13/11 . chapter 1
Great job! It's aweseome so far!