WHAT THE HELL DID YOU DO TO THE LORD OF THE RINGS? You disgraced the marvelous works of Tolkien by adding this junk of 'forgotten hobbit Tolkien left out'.

Oh hooked already keep going

Once again, I'm finding it rushed, you jump through the years quickly. However, if you were to continue, I think this could be a fun story.

Songbird

I would not say horrible to your writing skills. With anything, the more you do it, the better you can become. My one piece of advice, slow it down and explain things a little more. Don't be in such a hurry to get to a certain part, you forget to lead up to it.

Songbird

It's not that bad I've read some that are better and some that are worse

Neat story. I think the idea for a hobbit wizard is great! I can't wait till the next chapter!

This is cute but its moving too quickly for me to keep up try and get 'into' your characters thoughts and emotions and then perhaps stoopid plonkers like me will be able to keep up. I really did enjoy this so keep going.

I'm really lurving this story, it is sooo good and original if i may say so. Just one more thing to say RITE MORE!

*ring* "Hello? Oh, hi Amber! Yeah, I just read your LOTR story... What do I think of it? Well, it's pretty good for a Mary Sue. You don't know what a Mary Sue is? It's a story where you insert a character that is almost 'identical' to the author (love the 'original' name, by the way...) Anywayz, it's still a pretty kewl story." *hangs up phone* "Of course, the spelling stinks... But considering the author, it's not really that bad." *giant book comes flying through computer screen and hits Lynn in head* "Hey! When did the Trout sisters learn magic! Wait... Never mind... I don't want to know." *grin* (You can just ignore all of the above. I'm just in the mood to ramble on, and on, and on, and on, and on, and on, and on, and on...)