|Reviews for Victims of War|
| jarhead762 8/22/11 . chapter 4
Fucking hell...your painting an accurate picture. But hey, Price of Unity
| jarhead762 8/22/11 . chapter 3
Well...atleast she didn't give the covies the satisfaction
| jarhead762 8/22/11 . chapter 2
Great poetry? Didn't he still have a combat knife?
| jarhead762 8/22/11 . chapter 1
| Phantogram 8/21/11 . chapter 5
I really like these one-shots. As previous a previous review said, you need to add some victories in order to keep it realistic, however keep the depressing theme into it. Humanity takes heavy losses, even in victories.
The one thing I was kind of touchy on was in the fifth chapter with the Elite. It was too rushed in my opinion. An Elite, especially an Ultra, would never feel any sort of pity or remorse for humans, and would unquestionably obey and enjoy an order to kill humans. Would you feel bad if you killed hundreds of "aliens" that were opposing everything you have ever known? Probably not. An Elite may feel a pang of confusion as to why the humans were not allowed into the Covenant, but probably not full on guilt and remorse because they have killed so many humans.
Good work so far, look forward to more.
| TheLastHuman 8/21/11 . chapter 4
Well done, the depressing themes are original and well written. Plus its nice to see something other than spartans being brave and defiant till the end. (I always thought the name was corny)
| tigerwar 8/19/11 . chapter 5
all i can say is u almost made me cry i love how the way u make ur stories about the truth of war
| Friendly Alien 8/17/11 . chapter 5
Still loving the work your doing!
| Friendly Alien 8/13/11 . chapter 4
Didn't like this chap. It seemed to rushed, Come on he automatically kills them based on what again? That the evac is too far away. Their kids! Light weights! Run forest run.
Side note: Aside from this chap I like the realism (War is suppose to suck) In my opinion keep to the depressing one-shots but if you need to write some victories parts make it seem believable.
P.S Make sure you space your paragraphs more it will make it easier to read.
| Guest 8/13/11 . chapter 4
Hey really good story. Never seen a story in halo that was really depressing and gritty. Keep up the good work.