I oove this story. Everytime I see you have a new chapter it makes my day. Let me tell ya I certainly needed it today

I oove this story. Everytime I see you have a new chapter it makes my day. Let me tell ya I certainly needed it today

An amusing chapter that does a great job of presenting the characters in their element. My one gripe - grammar. A few things should be addressed, most notably 'larva.' The plural of the word, which is how you used it, is actually larvae, if memory serves. If that's incorrect, I apologize, but I'm rather certain that's right. Otherwise, though, this fic is really cool.

Clever twist on the whole mating thing. And I like the presentation of Trance's species' mating habits... very secretive and personal (akin to Vulcan pon'far... or however that's spelled). Seems you put a good amount of thought into the development of that plot point.

Well, I generally don't like people starting with a short chapter like this (even though I've been guilty of the same transgression from time to time), but you end up doing a fine job in limited time. You set the stage, move your characters into position, and end with a suspenseful, cliffhanger type conclusion that actually makes me want to see the next chapter. (Too often writers seem to just stop in the middle of a scene and feel they've created a cliffhanger... but you actually understand how to make that element work.) The only complaint I can come up with is a lack of description to add depth to the nicely paced dialogue. That's not too important yet, though, since you've only portrayed known characters in familiar settings thus far. Now to read the next chapter...

this chapter made me soo happy please write more

funny story.

cant wait for next part.

agree with this guy tekken something...

Good chapter!

Ok I get that but those feelings are still there and in a way the old Trance died that day. There has to be some confusion going on with the baby and Harper. The good and the bad... Glad you care so much for your fans. Write soon!

Heya! It's me, the author. ;) Just like to thank ya'll for your responses and encouragement.

Bolo, in response to your latest question, you'll notice that it went straight from the Ouroboros scene to Harper joking about it. In Ouroboros, Harper hasn't had time to fully grasp the fact that Trance is gone, he's worried more about dying. So he wouldn't feel that loss in that memory. And as he comes out of the memory, we go back to present Harper has had time to deal with all of this, even start to love the gal. That was my view when writing it at least.

If anyone else has any other questions, I will do my best to answer.

What about the pain, loss or the confusion cause by this uncareing in your face Trance.

More please

So the baby's talking. Cool.

I enjoyed chapter 14. I'm looking forward to reading more! Keep Writing :)

cliff hangers are evil and thats what 14 left us with, please please please write more soon