I really enjoyed the preview, I'm thinking it will turn into a nice little story. I just have one little issue, I doubt a castle of that size could have been built in a day, especially with the amount of Pokemon helping to build it.

But otherwise, I really enjoyed the chapter and I wish you good luck in completing the rest of it! :)

It's great so far, so I can only assume the rest will be excellent as well. Please finish, and I'll happily review it once it's out and published.

LoK is awesome! And this oneshot looks cute!

Nice collection of stories so far. I have to admit, the countless author's notes angered me a bit, but the writing was fabulous. I liked the ones with Gary and Ash as kids the most. Great writing, nice plots and stuff, and I hope you write more in the future.

I did! The yellow one taste bad! Hanna and me eat flowers all the time and we are 12

I really liked that chapter. Poor Gary. I like to imagine they made up, though.

I really enjoy the chapters about them when they're older, could you write another of those?

Awesomez! Keep up the great work!

I think you should have one with ash and Gary as four year olds on a sleepover kind of like in that bath one only the actual pull pranks like the feather with whip cream trick. Maby ash should wet the bed because in sick day you said he wet the bed when he was four

(I had to review this chap. since it says I've already reviewed the newest one...-_-)

Ah! That was such a great chapter! I loved it! The beginning part was sweet, with all the talk about loving something the most, and how you could immediately think they were going to write about each other. So when Ash said "Pokémon" instead, I was just as shocked as Gary. Altough that was something very Ash-like; I can easily see him doing that. (I think you did the right thing when making it a misunderstanding instead; no matter how much Ash loves Pokémon, I can't see him choosing them over his best friend. Not intentionally at least.) So it was a very nice twist; sad, but surprising and In-Character. Poor Gary... His outburst... He was really hurt and you captured that really well; I loved that scene. It made me heartbroken, and after something like that, who wouldn't be. I also felt so bad for Ash; when I cried about not knowing they could choose people, I think I cried a bit too. The end of this chapter was really powerful and sad. I loved it, altough it was such a sad one. I just want to hug them all!

I'm so happy you wrote a new chapter! I hope to see more soon. (And yes; Legend of Korra is awesome!)

The overall plot of this chapter is quite intriguing, and definitely deserves some follow-up exploration should you ever be so inclined. I found, however, that the writing itself had some mistakes - namely, many instances of run-on sentences. Nothing some proofreading and whatnot can't fix, though! _

That was utterly adorable, and I can't even.. gaaaah

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That was so cute! I have a thing for babies/toddlers and this certainly caught my heart. When both boys started bawling I laughed aloud because I just could see it so clearly. Gary pulling Ash's hair, tut tut! Though it seems he just wanted to have his attention, but his methods lacked discretion; like little kids do :D

It was also nice to read about Ash's father and see him being so... nice; since in my headcanon he's quite a bastard *laughs*

Keep it coming, bro! I love these

thank you, thank you, thank you! I loved this story! it was the best! again, thank you!

Omfg I just love Gary :D

G'job!

Aw! Such a cute chapter! Thank you for continuing your stories I really like them! :) you are made of awesome :D

I LOVE YOU.

WELCOME BACK!