Nice.

I LOVE IT! Please add more!

I can't wait for the next chapters. Love the intensity that you are able to achieve and the slow but steady build up. Hope the new chapters come soon.

Using Kane's name when you mean James. Just a small error but since Kane is an enemy it is confusing

update

HI I Love Anita Blake Novels and i love your Spin on it i really do, i've been going through a anita withdrawel but this has definitly made it better! but i only have one little sugestion and error correction...Jean cluade in Chapter two you have him referre to her as Mon Ami ...when Anita's pet name is Ma Petite(my little one) I dk if you had that on purpose but yeah..just wantedto let you know in case you didnt know (:

I...LOVE...THIS...STORY! I hope you update soon!

This is an extremely well-written story. There is a good balance between dialogue and description. You are very talented! :)

Keep updating hun! I love your story!

OHH, Great chapter! I think you capture Jean Claude very well:P

It might be interesting to devolop some feelings for her on Jean Claude's part for Mizelle, and some jealousy on Anita's part, I don't know but I'm intruiged.

I also like the part with Ash, and I like that I know what she looks like (btw very interesting how she looks)!

Good chapter! I like the flash back it was well written:P Some good dialouge too, some snark which I enjoyed!

wow. MIZELLE! coolios. :p Did you come up with the name or was it Anita's? i think your doing fine and it's good so far 0.0

This is good! I assume that it is a one shot right? Since when I went to review it it said "Review story."

One suggestion though I would break it up into paragraphs, its just me but I have a hard time following it with it all together.

You should do more chapters this has potential! The languge that you use here is really quite good. And I like that you made your OC (at least I think she is OC, I only read the first five books of AB) a water elemental. I also liked the part about her father.

I wish I knew what she looked like and how she came to know Anita. That's why I think you should do another chapter or several. But its up to you as the author, this was good and I hope you continue it!