I liked the story, but I felt the ending was very weak. Good luck on the contest.

egger- eager

steeped- stepped

Christmas is not celebrated in Japan very widely...they're all pretty much Zen Buddist.

*Shinji Sweat Drop*- Could you at least make it into a sentence?

Asuka wouldn't be afraid of Shinji...nor would he stand up to her...ever...

Oups- Oops

I'm going to get you, Asuka.- She'd never...EVER say that...

Oh yeah, by the way...it's not possible for snow to fall in post-second-impact Tokyo 3.

Serve- Serves

Hmm all these mistakes in what...just over 1000 words? I don't even think I got them all...

Let's just say you're probably going to lose horribly. Next time, do your homework and pay attention to the spellchecker.

Not bad. I could immagine Rei smiling and fighting back but I don't think that she would be laughing. Cute fic though!

... Eh? -_-;

Well, I'll admit it was creative, but aside from that... It could have been better.

Cool little story chibinaoka!Rei's a little bit out of character but otherwise this is a good fic.

Keep writing!

Sorry lass,I've seen better plots out there but on the plus side, you have a good grammar, paragraphing and readable style. It's just a bit out of character (evangelion is a bit more mature and dark) but good try anyway.

You know, I skimmed this story, looking for one key point... and I never found it.

The point I was looking for? Why it was snowing. In watching EVA, you MIGHT have noticed that Japan is stuck in perpetual Summer.

The bootm line? Your story is impossible... sorry...

-D

A nice and cute story, characters are mostly IC,... hell even Rei could have done this just to see what fun was about, though she would have been much more analytical.

dennisud