ok this fic ROCKS
mostly because i like the way you've been playing riddle
i hope you can start writing again soon so i thought i'd help by giving you the following idea.

The prophecy says that harry is the one to defeat the "DARK LORD" so what happens when he goes back to being old tommy riddle? He went dark because he lost bellatrix, would he turn good(ish) with Bellatrix AND Harry as... Anger sponges?

Love this and I hope for more!

In a way it's too bad you're leading toward the end of this story. You've set up a very interesting background story beyond just the Harry / Voldemort fight. Ah well, it's your story and I am enjoying it. So, thank you for sharing.

While I understand the point of view put out in this story about the power of the muggle world, I still think it's a bit one sided. If you have the time, and are interested there's a very well written counter argument in the story Forging the Sword. If you're interested in the argument but not the story, then it's largely in Chapter 10: x: etching the blade, starting with the line:

"Sit," he swept one hand out in a graceful gesture, indicating the chairs before his desk.

I'm still enjoying the story, but I just had to address this point.

I just re-read this and I sure hope that you get a chance to finish it off. It's got all sorts of interesting plot lines that just beg to be followed.

Looking forward to updates

Loved it.

Nice story. Of course I like all your stories, so make what you will of it.

I hope you get around to finishing this some time. You've portrayed a very different side of Riddle, in a very interesting and enjoyable story.
-Twy

This jumps a lot, the pov isn't always clear, the setting isn't known to the reader at many points, there are grammatical errors, your syntax could use some work, you have a tendency to run through dialogue and it can be not clear who is saying what.

Your spelling and vocabulary are very good and the specks of humor dropped in every once in awhile are a welcome reprieve from the emotionally charged atmosphere your writing centers on generally.

Meh. All in all this is acceptable.

If a student had turned in something with this level of work in my undergraduate creative writing class then I'd probably give them a C or B-.

Do finish it soon. Thank you.

You should reconsider your genre selection... Or at least add some of the other relevant genre's; angst, drama, family, hurt/comfort, and possibly even tragedy. This fiction focuses a lot of Harry's emotions and interactions with his family. Classifying this as an adventure is misleading.

Well, whatever you deem appropriate for this Harry - do finish it, please.

Sorry to hear you have difficulties writing this. It looked as if you maintained both universes separate yet interesting quite well.

Nice touch, the disillusioned Belatrix (and daughter)

I like the story.

update soooon ... coool fic