firstly just wow..

secondly wonderfull story, though abit abrubt ending, making it feel like the story went completely off track on page 5, seeing as it all gave the impression that she was becomming a real banshee and then it just went into a love story insted of what it had been until then, wich was a more action based general story.

but beside the ending its still wonderfull making the reader stick to it, 12 hours of reading!

there were a few gramatical errors that is mostly caused by overseeing it, seeing as the big "walls" of text can be very hard to read so more spaces in between would help make it easier readable.

allso if you spread it into more chapters, like 10, it would make it easier for you and your readers to keep track of not only gramatical errors but allso give natural pauses in the reading, alot of readers feel like they have to read until a chapter is over as there are no natural pauses until then.

it allso helps to avoid getting "word blind" as i would call it, getting trouble with focusing on one line in the text as there are so many so close and they just keep comming all the time.

but again, not a ending one expected from the title and how the story had been going.

and thirdly.. do write more stories as your a wonderfull writer allready D

Just read ch. 1 of Raine the Banshee: I love it so far, especially since I read (a LONG time ago) the book with the character 'Alias'. I tend to come across good adaptations by sheer chance.

FABULOUS!

Oh...I loved it! It's a beautiful story! Raine was an interesting character...please write a sequel!

Overall, I'm thoroughly impressed with your story. It was better towards the middle, though; in my opinion of course. Strangely enough, your ending didn't disappoint me as much as many endings do. Perhaps you should spin a tale about your character's children. (if you already aren't that is)

Rae

A wonderful story,loved it to the last drop ) , just wondering.. will there be a sequal? or wether you will write more stories?