This could be good but you need to edit a lot and make it longer. :/

Devon is crying in the corner and Ebony is slamming the computer. They are both screaming. Loud... O.o

This is from Ebony and Devon. We are furious!

For one: Velvela is in another pack and she is alpha! She is not beta!

Second: Cloud is now called Ivy. She has always accepted new members into her pack! -.-