I love this! It is so catching, I read it beginning to end!

I like the way you described Henry and Fern (though I think it was a bit melodramatic at the end - unnecessary), I also think it was very enjoyable. Just a few things to point out.

1. Check spellings
2. keep to the time era - a young teenaged girl wouldn't have been wearing mascara during the time the book was written
3. Describe the country settings a bit more

P.S. Don't be upset - you could make something BIG (by big I mean amazing) out of this story. Hope I helped.

You should not rate this story K if you put bad words like "ass" in it.

It was sad when Wilbur died.

Good work and pls do more chapters Keep it up )

It was good I liked it but I was sad when Wilbur was dead. You should keep going. Are you going to put anything in about charlete or her family?

o my GOODNESS! MY little Wilbur died! NOOOO! He was my favorite character! NOOO!

Fern's gotta let go... she's sick... LET GO FERN!

It's. OVER. Ah, well, now you know Henry. Now you know. ...KEEP HOLDING ONTO HOPE! SHE'S JUST UPSET! DON'T BE MAD!

Keep going :)