|Reviews for Team 7: A Retelling|
| lil' fayri grrl 6/13/13 . chapter 11
"boom-boom stick"! ohmygod yesssss! ...that was a reference wasn't it?
| hga 6/6/13 . chapter 3
"Don't feel bad, Naruto," Sasuke said in as even a voice as he could manage through his own exhaustion. "You still last a lot longer than me or Sakura do."
Which doesn't come out as well as I think you meant. That means Kakashi tortures Naruto even longer than he does the other two. "Squid Dance" indeed. :-)
| Eilyfe 6/3/13 . chapter 13
Wow, now that's what I call a riveting tale. Humor, action, a bit of mystery, and - of course - the Oni himself, Kakashi. Basically, everything a good Naruto story needs. I really enjoy the setting of a cohesive Team 7, and I firmly believe that if they had known about each other's life in cannon like this, the manga could have gone down this road too.
The Wave mission is done by nearly everyone, and sometimes it's quite bothersome, but I applaud you: while the mission itself isn't anything new, you did your best to spice it up. A brawl between Sakura and Naruto is a common occurrence, but to, deviously I might add, use it as a tool to lure their enemies out in the open? Now that's an interesting idea, and it worked too.
Their first solo mission was interesting as well, and it's clear that it isn't finished just yet. I do wonder what will happen. Maybe a daring rescue mission to save the daimyo? That would certainly be a boost to the team's reputation. Not to mention Kakashi, who'd have quite a nice time, bragging about his three chibis.
I also believe that despite its obvious use as a plot device, a new prophecy by the elder toad sage is a somewhat nouvelle concept. Don't know why it hasn't been used more often, but I'm glad that you did. Just can't believe that the big guy only existed in cannon to spout one measly prophecy.
Onto more formal things: The dialogues are stimulating, drawing the reader into the story with exactly the right mixture of humor and seriousness; no grammatical errors, or misspelling as far as I could see (and that! is a a really good indicator that a story is amazing. If I'm so drawn into a story that I don't notice any spelling errors, then - to me - there are none to be found); the formatting, too, is well done. Well, my only grievance is with the constant use of bold and cursive words, sometimes underlined too. I don't mind in principle, and it looks like you toned it down severely in the later chapters, but at the beginning you used it quite heavily (that's something of personal taste though, maybe the other readers like it).
That being said, I do believe that you have a potentially awesome story. The only thing it needs now is more length, more substance. Not that 100k words is bad, mind you, but it's easy to see that the legend of Team 7 2.0 has only just begun.
PS: The training exercise 'The grilled squid'... I remotely remember a scene like that in the old version of the movie drunken master. If that's indeed your inspiration, then I'd say that you have impeccable taste as well!
So far - and eagerly awaiting updates,
| Shadowface 5/30/13 . chapter 13
Awesome story, I hope you update soon.
| patrick the almighty observer 5/30/13 . chapter 13
well this certainty got interesting, i wonder how much this will alter the story now. wel i hope you update this again soon.
P.s. i thought that the three musketeers was a bad ass movie, I'm actually rather sad that it didn't do so well in the box office, I'm also rather impressed that you managed to take so much from the first couple minuets of the movie and integrate them into the story in a way that makes sense, and then continued from their as you deal with the changes this has caused.
| Mr.Lionheart 5/26/13 . chapter 13
I KNEW I'd read that scene with Jiraiya before!
Also, this fanfic is going off on a tangent from what I expected starting from about 2 or 3 chapters ago. The introduction of guns itself makes for a very different feel to the norm of Naruto fanfiction. I'm not saying that it's a bad thing, but I WAS looking forward to the Chuunin exams and now I just don't know what to expect.
| chrysanths 5/19/13 . chapter 2
Ah, I like this story, but I wish the alternate characterization was a bit more even. When you change one person, another stays mostly the same. Sakura is all the better for a bloodline and some dependability as a kunoichi. I almost wish Naruto had a bloodline by this point if that was all it took. Aha. No offense.
| BlackGryphon101 5/16/13 . chapter 13
Good story so far, however it looks like the part with Jiraiya and the toads sounds like it was copied from 'The Brother's Namikaze.' I really love your story so I think you should either ask for permisson or change that one part.
| saintjimmy84 5/13/13 . chapter 6
Three Musketeers. :-D
| saintjimmy84 5/13/13 . chapter 3
History's Strongest Disciple Kenichi. :-D
| AngeloftheAurora 5/8/13 . chapter 13
Did you use scenes from Hakumei, too? Both are awesome fics.
| Guest 4/29/13 . chapter 11
Naruto pulling the chains out of the wall had me rolling my eyes.
That's a MASSIVE amount of strength, the kind that could tear even a ninja in half.
| Eulphy Whitlock-Lupin 4/29/13 . chapter 13
This is utterly wonderful. But for the pairings... why is it that I can see an immediate SasuTen and NaruTema? Or is that my imagination. But, anyway, I just gotta love Team Seven!
| Parpallee 4/22/13 . chapter 13
I really like this story. I find the plot interesting and it is very well written. Keep up the great work and please update soon. .
| Wandering Crimson Sage 4/14/13 . chapter 13
Amazing, I'm actually glad that you're deviating so far away from canon, in a way that's actually making sense. I can't wait to see what's going on in Suna and Rikuzentakata. I'm also mildly curious about Orochimaru and the chunin exams...