Hope the up coming firefigh is good. Nice job building plot and suspense I think. Will have further comments later on.

A new enemy takes the field, I love it! The girls at the SWA have it cut out for them now. Langsford's rival must be bloody powerful to be able to intimidate such a skilled assassin. I look forward to the next chapter!

Again, your story shows a solid plot, displays just the right amount of research to give the scene depth without showing off, and provides some interesting characterizations. Also, as in the last review, I strongly urge you to get a beta with a few stories under his belt to show you what spelling, punctuation, and grammar revisions can do to improve it.

Your plotting shows imagination, but you need a spell-checker and a beta. Seriously. Spelling and grammar mistakes are like speed bumps and potholes that interrupt the flow of the story and make it difficult to stay immersed in the world you're creating. I see that you've been offered help; you should take it. You'll be amazed at how much diference it makes to the story.

Still a few spelling errors here and there, but your plot is solid. I liked the way you showed Jean's caring side despite his ruthlessness. It was quite well done. Also, the poem Langsford left behind was a classic!

The plot is very intriguing and I love the idea of a three-way battle between The Ace of Spades, Padania and the Social Welfare Agency. You have kept the characters true to their canon as well which is great and you are quite good at action scenes.

My only issue would be a fair few spelling and grammatical mistakes. You might want to find a beta-reader, in fact I could do it if you wanted?

Interesting. The SWA will have their hands full against two terrorist groups. This could be very interesting indeed. I look forward to reading more.