didn't make it past the disclaimer, all you need to say is I don't own sh-t. The formating is also really bad, and you should split the thing up into chapters.

Even though this was done years ago, you should still sort it out so more people would bother reading and reviewing it.

(I hope you don't think of this as a flame.)

I really enjoyed the story. I plan on following the storyline, to see what happens.