Sooo your story caught my attention and seemed pretty interesting! I like it a lot so far but curse you for your cliffy on chappy 3! I also noticed you haven't updated in awhile.. I hope that changes soon. Looking forward to your next chapter, not criticism needed.(:

Sooo your story caught my attention and seemed pretty interesting! I like it a lot so far but curse you for your cliffy on chappy 3! I also noticed you haven't updated in awhile.. I hope that changes soon. Looking forward to your next chapter, not criticism needed.(:

Bangs head on sceeem

AGGGRRHHHHHH I dislike cliff hangers! But oh my gosh that chapter was intense poor Kairi and Sora! I updated some more drabbles and oh man when I get my story uploaded it is so cliff hanger revenge haha lol lol anyway awesome job with this chapter!

poor Kairi i feel sorry for her... Anyway your doing a good job keep it up.

Your friendly neighbourhood Loz and Kh fan

The spelling seems pretty clean. Little to no spelling mistakes and same goes with the grammar.

"he turned and called back to Sora,before breaking into a run."

I believe there should be a space after the comma.

Other than that, it's a good start.

Liking it so far _ interesting to see how Kairi is in this state and how Sora and Riku will react hehe. Update soon!

Hello DarkHairedDreamer,

I love your story! you have gotten me hook and don't worry grammer and spelling are my worse things too! again love it so far! keep it up. I like Kairi alot I have and am going to have a few more drabbles about her if you would like too read

again great story so far update asap please!

Yentix