Good job. You seem to be the only one besides me who likes Jazz. Your story is a bit like mine.

Hmm... Good story, but as I said to another one of your fanfics, I hate YoyoxJazz. Anyways, you saved Yoyo from the Rhinos with Jazz? I was ganna do it with Clutch but I fell so many darn times that I ended up doing it with Beat. I would have done it with Mew if I remembered to get her then. .

I'm doing this to my own story for a reason. I know it was a little fast-paced, but it WAS the first fanfic I wrote, and I wanted to get to the Star Fox fanfic I wrote afterwards. Don't worry. My future fics won't be as fast-paced.

Well, it was okay, but I think the pace was a little too fast. Like, Jazz seemed to get angry and storm out in like a few seconds. Slowing down could help. That said, you write well, with good spelling, grammar, etc, and I'll even forgive you the fact it's a JGRF fic!