|Reviews for Long Forgotten Promises|
| shadowcaster01 4/28/13 . chapter 1
I usually don't read second person style fics, mostly because the ones I've seen aren't very well written.
Apart from some inconsistencies in your tensing, I found it to be sad, yet bittersweet. Victoire's expressions flowed fairly well with the pace of the story, and it made me wonder how the actual confrontation went down when she found everything out. The past memories of her childhood were a nice touch.
Overall, this was a nice little fic. Well done.
| keeptheotherone 8/31/11 . chapter 1
Oh, this is some nice angst! Very good use of second person POV, too. Favorite line: "When the only guy you needed in your life was your father; when you didn't alienate yourself from your family; when your sister was your hero and your brother looked up to you." Nice job!
| XxXRegretXxX 8/8/11 . chapter 1
Ah. What can I say that I haven't said a million times before? I'm starting to feel very redundant. Let's keep this short, shall we?
This was awesome. You were awesome. The end.
| Rising From The Flames 8/6/11 . chapter 1
This was very touching. The imagery felt very real; I felt like I could feel the cold broom handle too. It flowed really well, and I feel like you put just the right amount of information in. However, it did feel a little rushed (not the story, but the writing.) I almost felt like it wasn't proofread before posting (which I don't always do, so I can't really talk) I noticed a couple of typos, in the middle there were one or two sentences where the point of view got a little muddy, and the last line is really cliche. All in all a good story, the parts in between those little things were really good, but you might want to go back and just read over it one more time. :)
| selenehekate 8/5/11 . chapter 1
Wow, this is a really deep story. I love the point of view this is written in; it's incredibly unique. You had almost no grammatical errors, and I almost wish this story was longer because it was that haunting and lovely. I would've liked for you to have focused more on the specific memory that Dominique experienced, but overall, great job!
Use of Prompt/Age: 6/10
Grammar/Writing Mechanics: 9/10
Overall story: 8/10
| yellow 14 7/23/11 . chapter 1
Really sad, really touching. Keep writing