I wouldn't say your fic is terribly griping but it's considerably better than the majority on here. Kitty makes a nice contrast to the usual plucky heroines that typically star in novelization fics but not so overwhelmingly sarcastic that she becomes unbearable to the reader.

To be terribly honest your fic is solid but it has a serious lack of flair that turns it into oatmeal with the tiniest bit of zest that is Kitty. It's bascially a novelization of Diamond/Pearl, the kind of fics that usually die from lack of interest. What drew me to your fic in the first place was three possible plot doors that you presented in the opening, Jirachi, the Game and rule bending. Jirachi is usually treated as a good wholesome wish granter but what if he/she was actually evil. Not necessarily baby kicking evil but doesn't understand human ethics evil. The Game could be some evil enitity that trying to take over Kitty's mind integrating her into itself. What if Kitty actively tries to be genre savvy but Jirachi continually morphs the world to foil her at every turn? Just some suggestions, personally I would like to see the fic take a turn to the horror genre, toeing the line if you will.

Overall you're a solid writer, you're just not pushing the envelope at all and it's hurting you. I would love to see more. Good luck with the next chapter.

Hehehe, she shouldn't be too down 'cause add in some hard work and you've got yourself a raging Gyarados!

Wow, I love this story! I'm surprised that it doesn't have more reviews

Kitty is such a bitch! But I love her for that very much. :D

I like her sassy and pessimistic attitude and her personality is creepily similar to mine. Sorta. Should I be proud of that, idunno.

Anyways, keep up with the story and I'll love you forever.

An understandable view of a person who does not love or respect the term of 'child empowerment' in pokemon games. She seems to be the girl who loves the reality most.

"The reality is more efficient than the report." Motto is her brief life motto that drives her. No offense.

Plus...

I think jirachi (or her younger sister) is your dearly departed character facing death by the protagonist of your story's ending. But what I can see to day is that maybe most of the people today stick only on one thing.

"Either: grow up and forget your past days; reality demands only business. Or stick on to your chilhood; Fearing that growing up will not make you good and honest in life; but making you feel young forever."

That was very sad. Many people don't know how to have both childhood and adulthood growing together. Instead, they just overpower the other until either one dies away from his/her heart and morality.

Overall, she's like dark samus to me,sort of. Impressive humor.

Well written, funny and the main character isn't a Mary Sue. I like this fic, definately going on alert. And by the way, I think it's horribly under rated with only this much reviews.

This is a well-written story. The way you manage to make this story funny is unique in itself, and works very well. The main character has a (somewhat) likable personality, and the whole Jirachi twist makes this fanfic very worthwhile. Thanks!

I like this, as much as your other stories. You are very descriptive, and your sarcasm makes me all warm and fuzzy. :D I approve! Keep up the good work.

Phoenix Lam