Oh. My. Gosh. I read this because I was bored, and it sounded weird, and i was expecting something stupid.

I was wrong on all counts. This is incredible writing! That was amazing, it was so believable. It was incredibly realistic, actually, even though it's such a weird pairing. Like, my breath caught. I still can't breathe quite right. I wont forget you...

Such an odd pairing..still beautifully story but the strong emotions behind it emerged on great writing!

Believability: 4/5. I liked how you showed that he was her mentor kind of thing when she was younger and they just never forgot each other. Being a first year, I’m sure he would have left a lasting impression on her by being there to help her and so that was believable to me. I docked a point because I just couldn’t picture Bill kissing her (hugging her, yes, but not kissing her) while being married to Fleur. It just seemed a bit OOC for him, in my opinion.

Grammar/Etc: 8/10. I saw a few mistakes, but nothing that really distracted me from the drabble.

Flow: 4/4! I loved the set up of this drabble! You kept the style and flow of it going perfectly through the whole thing and it really worked.

Creativity: 4/5. I really loved the set up of this and how you showed their relationship when she was young. You really put your own spin on BillKatie and I enjoyed it a lot.

Likeability: 1/1. Despite being put a bit off by the whole kissing part, I did enjoy reading this piece a lot. You definitely deserve this point!

Overall: 21/25. Beautiful piece!

-Morghen

Very sweet piece—Bill is irresistible!

Believability: 4/5. Someone sticking out in your mind is good…but Bill /had/ married Fleur. How'd he explain that away in the face of his "love" for Katie?

Grammar/etc.: 8/10. A couple of unwarranted commas, and "the Final Battle" should just have been "the final battle" because its proper name was "the Battle of Hogwarts," but otherwise okay.

Creativity: 3/5. I liked that they forgot but then she couldn't. However, him just suddenly /loving/ her was a little too easy.

Flow: 4/4. A decent pace and the occasional repetitions "She couldn't forget/Even though" gave it a beat like that of a poem. Nice.

Likeability: 0/1. Though I liked the idea, I felt it was simply too easy for Katie to have her affections returned.

Total: 19/25. I would've liked to see inside Bill's head some more.

-mew! :)

wow what a crack paring if ever there was one but a good one nonetheless very very good

This is really sweet - the repetition works very well and the writing's lovely. Great job!

So sweet! Very cute!