|Reviews for In The Beginning|
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 11
YES XANATOS PLOTTING AND OWEN HELPING YES YES YES.
*cough* I'm sorry. I just get very happy when I see this sort of thing.
I love that 'Fox' is now her personal code/nickname from Xanatos.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 10
*agrees with the entirety of this chapter's author's notes* That sounds like them.
Yep. I'd rather guessed Owen would have an empty apartment.
Very nicely done chapter. The plot thickens ;)
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 9
Ah, how lovely to see The Plan put into motion.
I actually am curious as to what Owen's apartment looks like.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 8
Oh poor Owen. He has no idea what he's getting into.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 7
Oh poor, poor Owen, being set up. Janine is deliciously crafty here and I an convinced I would not want to be in her way.
Also. Prank war. Win.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 5
*giggles* I can rather imagine Puck there in Owen's mind going 'Crap! Abort conversation! Abort conversation!' when David and Janine get to grilling him.
Very nice. I like this idea of Renard trying to set Janine up with Owen and her inviting David.
And of course, the missed spot. Actually the entire last bit.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 4
"I was letting you lead."
Yes. Perfect. Owen dancing. Perfect.
Though I'm curious- is it actually a thing that Owen claims to have attended Oxford? Because I've always had that particular headcanon myself and I don't remember if it was one I came up with or one that I found somewhere!
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 3
*giggles* that was beautifully handled. Still loving this fic.
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 2
Interesting thought, the idea that Owen has mild Asperger's. That would be an interesting explanation...
| Obi's Second Cousin 12/15/12 . chapter 1
*giggles* Already Owen can predict what Xanatos needs. I love it.
| wtchcool 10/7/12 . chapter 16
Might I suggest that posting at about 2:30 in the morning when you don't have spellcheck is begging for accidents? Quibbles: 1. You wrote: "He looked around for a moment, foolishly, as though perhaps he'd simply replaced it". I think you meant to say "he'd simply misplaced it". 2. "He shouldn't have had any difficultly dealing with a recalcitrant inferior"; I believe that should be "any difficulty." 3. "Renard said in lew of greeting", that should be "in lieu of greeting." 4. "Vogel was giving him a narrow eyed look though from behind the CEO though". Note that you used the word "though" twice in that sentence when once will do. 5. You wrote, "at least some of them are crap what what I pay them for." As you can see, you wrote the word "what" twice in a row. I think you might've meant "crap at what I pay them for." 6. "In addition to your duties as floor supervisor want you to evaluate", that should be "...as floor supervisor I want you to..." 7. "That thing your feeling", shouldn't that be "That thing you're feeling"? 8. I believe that should be "David didn't have the energy to devote to.." instead of "David didn't have the energy to devout to examining..."
*snickers* I'm sure Owen hated it, but I loved Puck's appearance at the end.
| Sanyu DarkStar 10/7/12 . chapter 16
so it was puck who stole the pens?
| Zuzanny 10/7/12 . chapter 16
I really really really enjoyed this chapter! The line about the desk being in his office made me laugh. And the PENS! Wonderful! And I liked the little flash of Puck. I look forward to the next part.
| Vanillasiren 10/7/12 . chapter 16
Oooh, Puck came out a little at the end, I liked that! This was a good chapter, I liked the developments. Looking forward to the cameo(s?). I guess David does have somethings to learn, doesn't he?
| Vanillasiren 10/4/12 . chapter 15
Yeesh David, I thought you bought a clue about Owen's feelings towards Janine in the last chapter! I did like Owen punching that guy out to defend Janine's honor. He really is fond of the little halfing, isn't he? This was a funny chapter, I like how Owen was sort of sneakily nice to David while also being ... well, not so nice in some parts.
And I vote for a Banshee (or Molly) cameo. Just because ... well if you've read my stuff, you know why. Barring that, maybe Coyote or Raven (or both make an appearance). In my head-cannon, they're totally brothers. Might be nice to see "Anastacia" too ... or is that one too many cameo suggestions?
More soon please! I love this story!