Wow, that was so...creepy. I love this story. Anyway I hope you keep up the good work.

Pretty good take on the Higurashi series.

You portrayed horror in a good manner. It had a great flow, putting Rena is a nice touch to. It's a good concept to make things go round and round. Poor eyes. XD

If you'll watch the later episodes of the series, you'll stop calling Mion 'Demon', you know why? *spoiler alert* hahaha.

You're vocabulary is quite good too. You'll just have to practice on constructing sentences in a smoother manner.

Thanks for the story, and write more.