|Reviews for You Were Certain You Loved Her|
| Qu0thTheRavenNeverm0re 7/30/11 . chapter 1
Well, I have a few things to say.
Commas are your friends- use them.
I'm liking the line- by- line format. It fits the foggy idea of remembering just certain feelings in a memory, and the focus on just her and nothing else really adds to James's feelings and builds up the devoted character who hides his attraction to her under teasing and taunts. Do you understand what I'm saying? Good, because I don't. I never do.