| Reviews for Love Casts But Fleeting Shadows |
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MissGardenia 8/7/11 . chapter 1Off-hand comment: Good to see someone understands the combination of necessary clearances and need to know. Many people just think about the first and don't realize the second. |
RadiantBeam 8/3/11 . chapter 1Two things I really liked right off the bat; first, the argument between Lutecia and Vivio felt very "real" to me. God knows we've all had those moments where we think we're doing what's best for our loved ones by telling a little white lie to keep them from worrying too much, only for it to backfire on us horribly when it turns out that in the process we only made them worry more! An especially nice touch to bring up the fact of things left unsaid, which makes sense; in the immediate wake of Lutecia's breakdown and Vivio coming to terms with things, I doubt either of them ever really had the chance to sit down and seriously talk about their thoughts and feelings, and then it became so peaceful that neither of them probably wanted to bother with it for fear of stirring something up. Second, that the actual lovemaking takes place after they calm down from the fight, and isn't actually, well, angry sex/lovemaking, which for some reason or another was what I thought was actually going to happen when you first brought up the idea to me; it does an excellent job of showing that the bad feelings have been cleared away and now all they really want to do is reconnect with each other at every level, as opposed to just jumping each other in the heat of the moment and possibly having an even worse situation when the lust fades. On the actual lemon part of the lemon, I like a great deal how the sex didn't feel overly long or over-descriptive; you show just enough for us to know what is going on and why, and that is always a good strength when it comes to writing these kind of things, where showing the sex plays an actual role in the story and character focus instead of just the implication that it happened. Also, can I be honest and admit the tie comment had me snickering a bit? Mostly because I was thinking of Lutecia in "On The Matter of Ties" and how the tables had turned! A nice touch as well, having Lutecia being called "Lulu" in the act as opposed to Lutecia or "Cia"; another little sign of intimacy between them, and yes you managed to salvage it quite nicely. :p I sense omake potential in how that nickname came about, or if someone happened to overhear Vivio calling her that... To my Favorites list, away! |
deathcurse 8/2/11 . chapter 1I really loved the opening scene. It entirely gave me a "cozy, long-term relationship couple" feel, with Vivio cooking in their house and yet having funny callbacks to familiar days and familiar people (I laughed at the shout-out to "Steel Queen"-I see that Vivio *did* get the breadstick recipe from Shamal! _-). Live in partner...so they're not married yet, eh? _- (We shall be waiting for that moment by RB...anytime now... P) It was kind of funny, how Bonneville kind of interpreted Vivio's distraction as worry for any transmission of poisons through "intimate contact" XD-I see her drunken PA system annoucements are still fresh in people's memories P. This interaction did get my attention, as I was sure at this point that something was off and that a fight was likely to happen (even if I hadn't known that there would be a fight in this fic). I loved the last line: "Vivio reached for the onion; she could feel the tears welling up anyway." Ouch! As always, I'm very impressed on how you can introduce characters to new people so that they understand, and yet also introduce new concepts to the old readers. Note after having read through the fic once and on a second read as I'm typing this review-I totally missed the fact that Vivio is placing significance on this day that isn't a classic anniversary day! So seeing Vivio's anger as Lutecia said that she didn't trust her made a lot of sense ). It was interesting how the argument kind of shifted between who got angry, and for more aggressive moments and quieter moments to happen. "Well, what good are you, then?"-LOL, Vivio, you totally knew what response you were going to get for a statement like that _-. Hm, Lutecia is wearing a tie *drools* _-. There is a reason why I found Hayate's uniform hotter than Nanoha's or Fate's during StrikerS _. And yes, I did notice your sneaky play on the Lulu vs. Cia argument! D Alright, I'll accept Lulu as a pet name of a pet name, how's that? P It's funny, the flow of the fic (and Vivio's early hints about the significance of the day) had me thinking that it was going to end with a proposal. I'm so glad you did NOT go that route, first of all because it would be twisted as hell to propose after a fairly large fight, and also because it would be such a sappy, cliche and BLAH way to round off a fic like this XD;;. |
CeeLes 8/2/11 . chapter 1Very good story! Lutencia hide things back to Vivio even have talked so much about it. The good thing is that they always end up telling the truth and forgiveness. And now with sex, hehehehe. Thank you very mucho for sharing another story Vicia. As always, im cntinue forward to reading more here. And, again, ask for an apology in advance for grammatical errors. T_T |
ZonaRose 8/2/11 . chapter 1I love these two. There is so much spice to them. Nice cold shower chapter my friend. _ RB's "Shadowverse" is great. As always I look forward to more from you. ZR };- |